Thriller WLHTA - The Serpent Of Underworld.
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Hey AP bro.!!
First of all,. I was not a regular reader of this site. Few weeks back a friend of mine shared 3 pdf's of a story, jiss ka naam tha "Wah Life Ho Toh AIsi". When I started reading the 1st part, jhoot nahi bolunga I literally found that boring because story ka plot politics based tha aur characters k naam par sirf male he male they, like deva bhai, AP, ravi., sam etc... and mujhe iss type ki stories bilkul bhi pasand nahi hain jo politics based hoon aur jiss ki cast mai sirf male characters hoon. Actually I prefer hatred type of stories, aur part 1 toh start he adultry scenes se hota hai jab AP aur ravi school mai ek mam ko dekhte hain and then wo raju ke area mai jate hain and then deva bhai ki party mai buisness deal k liye deva bhai khud AP ko kehte hain to help him kese bhi to lock the deal and AP uss Buisnessman ki wife aur beti ke sath hota hai. Ab iss sab k baad I thought ke plot shayad aisa he hoga.but but but but...
Jab maine story ko continue kiya toh thankfully story mai aur koi adultry scene nahi aya aur plot aisa intrusting hua k I can't even explain!!! Then mujhe pata bhi nahi laga kab mai ne wo 3 pdf's khatam kiye, no idea!
After that I started looking for the 4th part of this story and finally I found it and not just found it within 4 to 5 days I finished reading till your latest update. So, I just want to say please throw your updates as soon as you can aur agar ho sake toh update ki thodi si length increase kar do, If dosen't effect your time and update quality..
Lastly, I must say split personalities disorder based yeh plot ab tak ka best plot hai, and the way you defined those 3 personalities. Like 1.0 orignal one, 2.0 AKA Murchent of death and lastly our owns most desastrous personality 3.0 AKA Hooded serpent or Javul.
Love your story bro aur aap ne kaha tha that this might be the last part of the story so please aisa matt karna continue the story as long as you can. I will try to give reviews on your updates
First of all,. I was not a regular reader of this site. Few weeks back a friend of mine shared 3 pdf's of a story, jiss ka naam tha "Wah Life Ho Toh AIsi". When I started reading the 1st part, jhoot nahi bolunga I literally found that boring because story ka plot politics based tha aur characters k naam par sirf male he male they, like deva bhai, AP, ravi., sam etc... and mujhe iss type ki stories bilkul bhi pasand nahi hain jo politics based hoon aur jiss ki cast mai sirf male characters hoon. Actually I prefer hatred type of stories, aur part 1 toh start he adultry scenes se hota hai jab AP aur ravi school mai ek mam ko dekhte hain and then wo raju ke area mai jate hain and then deva bhai ki party mai buisness deal k liye deva bhai khud AP ko kehte hain to help him kese bhi to lock the deal and AP uss Buisnessman ki wife aur beti ke sath hota hai. Ab iss sab k baad I thought ke plot shayad aisa he hoga.but but but but...
Jab maine story ko continue kiya toh thankfully story mai aur koi adultry scene nahi aya aur plot aisa intrusting hua k I can't even explain!!! Then mujhe pata bhi nahi laga kab mai ne wo 3 pdf's khatam kiye, no idea!
After that I started looking for the 4th part of this story and finally I found it and not just found it within 4 to 5 days I finished reading till your latest update. So, I just want to say please throw your updates as soon as you can aur agar ho sake toh update ki thodi si length increase kar do, If dosen't effect your time and update quality..
Lastly, I must say split personalities disorder based yeh plot ab tak ka best plot hai, and the way you defined those 3 personalities. Like 1.0 orignal one, 2.0 AKA Murchent of death and lastly our owns most desastrous personality 3.0 AKA Hooded serpent or Javul.
Love your story bro aur aap ne kaha tha that this might be the last part of the story so please aisa matt karna continue the story as long as you can. I will try to give reviews on your updates
Ek suggestion hai agar lena chaho toh, otherwise you are the boss you can throw this straight to the bin.
I know story mai jab tak errotisism ya clean adultry scenes na ho toh story mai maza nahi aata but iss k bina bhi aap ne story bohat ache se manage ki hui hai, but mera suggestion yeh hai k as you are not focusing on the adultry in the story why don't you add romansism a little more, like part 1 jiss mai main female lead character k liye riya thi, part 2 mai ana but part 3 jiss mai aap ne pura flashback dekhaya k AP uss time kahan tha aur uss ne kiya kiya ab uss time jab AP headquaters mai tha uss ke paas bohat si female cast thi but unn mai se sirf sara he AP mai interested hai yeh bhi humay part 4 mai pata laga aur wo bhi just kuch scenes ke liye. Toh kya aap sara aur AP ki chemistry thodi detailed mai likho ge like is she realy in love with AP ya yeh sirf affection, attraction ya infatuation hai.
I know story mai jab tak errotisism ya clean adultry scenes na ho toh story mai maza nahi aata but iss k bina bhi aap ne story bohat ache se manage ki hui hai, but mera suggestion yeh hai k as you are not focusing on the adultry in the story why don't you add romansism a little more, like part 1 jiss mai main female lead character k liye riya thi, part 2 mai ana but part 3 jiss mai aap ne pura flashback dekhaya k AP uss time kahan tha aur uss ne kiya kiya ab uss time jab AP headquaters mai tha uss ke paas bohat si female cast thi but unn mai se sirf sara he AP mai interested hai yeh bhi humay part 4 mai pata laga aur wo bhi just kuch scenes ke liye. Toh kya aap sara aur AP ki chemistry thodi detailed mai likho ge like is she realy in love with AP ya yeh sirf affection, attraction ya infatuation hai.