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Romance Izhaar - a - Mohabbat ( sab & bad Love story ) ~ Completed

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Agar pure story ki baat kare To mujhe bas 2 update pasand aaye hai ...first and last ..indono update me laga jaise wo insan hai ,wo bhi kuchh soch sakte hai, reaction de sakte hai..baki sare update aise the jaise wo koi insan nhi game ke character ho ..jab marji Jo Kara liye..unhe alag Kar do aur tab Tak kiye raho jab Tak man na bhare aur phir Mila do ,aur wo yantrawat mil bhi jayenge ..how stupid..main character ka koi apna soch nhi hai ,wo koi decision nhi le sakte ,stand nhi le sakte...to phir wo Kya Kar sakte hai...kingu tu ye kahakar baat nhi taal sakta ki hero ko akal der se aayi...ye kahana bachakana bate lagegi ,joki mujhe tumse ummid nhi hai..mujhe shuru me laga dhruva ke anadar thoda dabbupan hai , wo der se baate samajhata hai ...lekin ant aate aate Mai samajh gaya ki problem dhruva me nhi hai ,usse aisa banaya gaya hai jaha uski kisi ko bhi fark nhi ,yaha Tak khud writer ne bhi usse apne fantasy ke liye bharapur istemal Kiya hai ..lekin yaha gadbad fantasy pura karna nhi hai yaha gadbad ye hai ki writer ne main character se koi Matlab hi nhi rakha wo bas unse apna manchaha kaam karwane laga..jabki Mera manana hai ki writer jab Tak character ke sath rishta nhi bana leta wo tab Tak charactero ke sath wo nyay nhi Kar pata Jo ek writer ko karna chahiye...iss story me years aise beet rahe the mano jaise months..aur main character pata nhi kis duniya me ji rahe the ...unhe to pata hi nhi chalata tha ki Kai years betate ja rhe hai ...ye to hue wo baate Jo mujhe lagi ki ye kami thi..


Lekin agar baat Kare updates ki to jaisa ki dikhaya gaya hai ki dhruva aur aksha akasar Nadi kinare milte the..aur dikhaya gaya hai ki dhruva ki perpose Karne me phat rhi hai...Chalo ye thik hai..lekin ek baat ye bhi Satya hai ki Kai baar baate bina bole hi samane Wala sabkuchh samajh jate hai..to bina perpose kiye bhi unke bich wo rishta ban Jana chahiye tha ...

Ab aate hai aage to dekhate hai ki Varun ne jhoot bola ki akasha usse pyar karti hai , aur ye maan bhi liya ..wow great...ye wali bakchodi mujhe palle nhi padi..agar aksha Varun se pyar karti hoti to wo jarur Kai baar apne baato me Varun ka jikra karti rahti..uski tarife karti rahti...aisa to ho hi nhi sakata ki koi larki kisi se pyar Kare aur apne dosto ko uski tarife na sunaye ..ye ladako par bhi lagu hota hai...khud dhruva aksha ki baate karta rhata tha apne dosto se...so ye wali bakchodi mere palle nhi padi...

Khair jab dhruva ko pata Chala ki aksha waha hai to wo kyo nhi gaya waha..joki ek normal ghatna hoti ye ki koi girl/ boys apne pyar me mile bewfai ke baare me samane wale se confront na kare...
Khair aage dekhane par pate hai ki dhruva shadi Kar liya , lekin usake sath khush na hone ke Karan talak ho jata hai...Matlab ye kya chutiyapa hai..
Aksha se pyar bhi hai ..aur koi kosis bhi nhi ...
Aur jab aksha finally dhruva se milti hai to ek aur kahani samane aati hai..jisme aksha ye kahti hai ki Varun ne usse manipulate Kiya ..what the hell ..agar usne kaha hai ki dhruva ko jail hui hai to wo mil bhi to sakti thi dhruva se..ya pure 1 years ke gap me ek baar dhruva ke gharwalo par call bhi to Kar sakti thi... after all wo itna busy bhi nhi thi ki wo dhruva ke baare me janane ki ek kosis bhi nhi Kar sakti thi...yaha par iasa laga jaise aksha ek machine hai , Jo Jo chahe wo karwa sakta hai..koi aksha koi decision le hi nhi sakti...
Aage wahi ki jab pata Chala sachchai tab Tak tumahari shadi ho chuki thi bla bla bla...fuck off
Ab agar ham bedant ko dekhe to wo bhi chutiya hi nikla ...Chalo man liya ki uske hatho Varun Mara gaya , to wo jail Jane se bacha kyo nhi..Ghar me eklota kamane Wala larka tha..abhi ek beta hua tha , nayi nayi shadi hui thi...lekin usse bhi Kya fark parta hai ..uska apna koi bhi emotion hi nhi hai...wo bhi bas ek machine style me kaam karta Chala gaya..jaise mano wo uska task that..

Aur last me batata hai ki mujhe sachchai ka pata tha lekin Maine ye baat chhupayi thi ...lekin kyo iska reason ekdam ghatiya ki Mai tumahare shadishuda jivan me darar nhi Lana chahata tha...how foolish na ...jabki ye baate janana dhruva ka hak tha..lekin iss story ke charactero ka kya hi kahana jab Tak unko command nhi Diya jata tab Tak wo apana munh nhi kholanege..
Khair ant bhala to sab bhala...
Nice story ..keep it...farar story par update ane ki ummid karte hai...
 

KEKIUS MAXIMUS

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lovely ending 😍..
to aksha kamjor ho gayi thi kyunki khana peena kam kar diya tha usne jabse wo ghar laut ke aayi thi aur khudko gunahgar mehsus kar rahi thi dhruva ka ..
waise arya ne sahi kaha ki agar dhruva ka pyar sachcha hota to wo aksha par vishwas karta par dhruva bhi apne pareshaniyo se gujra tha to vishwas karna thoda mushkil ho hi jaata hai ..
hospital me aksha ke saath kuch waqt bitane ko mil hi gaya tha dhruva ko par uske theek hone par usse mil hi nahi paaya aur na hi call kar paaya ..
par aakhir aksha ne hi call karke usko pahadi par bula liya aur dono ne apne gile shikwe dur kar liye ..
aur aakhir me sachche pyar ki jeet ho hi gayi 😍😍😍..
aksha aur dhruva ek ho gaye .

in dono ke pyar ka dushman sirf ek hi tha jo sabse bada kamina nikla dosti ke naam par 😡..
warna itna tadapna nahi padta dono ko ..

maja aa gaya kahani padhke aur dono ka pyar pura hote dekhkar 😍..
 

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update << 22 >> Muqammal Ishq (Izhaar-e-Mohabbat)



bike sidhi mene aksha ke ghar ke bahar hi roki thi .. kuch der sochvichar karke me ander gya to mujhe ander koi nhi dikha jabki 2 room ke darvaje khule the .... kuch der baad beshakhi hath me liye aksha ki behen bahar aai , pehle to vo mujhe kuch der tak dekhti rhi or baad mujhe yha ane ka karan puchi to mene sidha or sapat bol diya ki " aksha kaha hai , mujhe usse milna hai " ... mere swal par aksha ki behen ne jo javab diya use sun kar mere pairon tale jamin khisak gai kyonki uska javab ye tha ki " aksha 8 din se hospital me admit hai "


ABB AGGE ...


me vha se namm ankhon se hospital ke liye nikal gya ... jab me sheher pahuncha tab mujhe yaad aya ki mujhe to aksha ke hospital ka address hi nhi pta ? yani mujhe ye bhi nhi pta ki aksha sheher ke kis hisputal me admit hai ... aksha ke hospital me admit hone ki khabar sunkar me etna tut gya gya aksha ki behen se hospital ka address bhi nhi puch paya ... khair mene vha moujud 7 hospital me se bari - bari aksha ko khoja or akhir me us hospital me pahunch hi gya jis hospital me aksha admit thi


me hampte hue hadbadata hua us ward ke pass pahuch gya jaha aksha ke dad ke sath sath aksha ke jiju or Arya khde the jo kisi docter se discution kar rhe the ... me apni sanse durast karte hue dhire un logo ki or bda or unke pass pahuck kar unke free hone ka intejaar karne lga ... mujhe jyada intejaar nhi karna pda means 5-7 minuts baad docter vha se aksha ke jija ke sath chla gya

unke jate hi Arya or Aksha ke dad ki najar mere par pdi , dono mujhe hairani se dekhne lge or kuch der baad normal ho gye ... me kuch kadam chalkar unke pass pahuncha

" Na..namaste uncle " ... dono hath jodkar me rundhe hue swar me bola , pta nhi kyo par es vakt bhi meri lal ankho me anshu ki bunde ubhar aai

" Namaste dhruva beta " ... vinamra bhav se aksha ke dad mera abhivadan swikar karte hue bole " Ye tumhari ankho ko kya hua or ye anshu kis liye ? sab kushal mangal to hai na ? " ... aksha ke dad ki baton me vayang saff jhalak rha tha

" J..Ji uncle sab thik hai " .. ek gehri sans lete hue me bola " A..aksha ko kya hua uncle ? V..vo es vakt kaha hai ? i wanna meet him ! " ... kehkar me ek najar Arya ko dekha jo bhav sunya hokar meri baat suna rha tha

" Kyo milna chahte ho aksha se ? " ... kehkar uncle mujhe swal bhri najro se dekhne lge

" Vo..vo me vo me bs usse milna chahta hu " .. hath jodkar me fir bola .. " Please uncle mujhe aksha se milne dijiye , usse baat karni hai " ... bebashi or lachari meri baton me saf jhalak rhi thi

" Baat fir kabhi kar lena ! abhi tum yha se chle jao or fir kabhi yha matt ana , yhi hum sab ke liye or aksha ke liye sahi hoga " ... uncle ne ek pal ke liye mujhe asman se jamin par patak diya ... uncle ne bhle hi sehej or vinamra bhav se mujhe kaha but mujhe unke baatein jehrili tir ki trah chubi jiska dard mujhe mere sine ke left side me hua

" M..me j..jyada vakt n..nhi lunga uncle , bs mujhe unse 5 minuts baat karni hai "

" sidhi baat bhej me nhi gushti kya ? mene mna kiya na fir kyo befujul ki baat kar rhe ho ? jao yha se ! " ... thode garam lehje me uncle mujhse bole , par mere jaise kamm dimag insan ke kaise itni asani se samajh jata

" Bs ek baar unke dekh lene dijiye ? I promise me fir kabhi yha nhi aunga " ...

" Dhruva tum jao yha se nhi to khamkha baat bigad jayegi "... aksha ke dad ke bolne se pehle hi Aarya shant bhav se mere kandhe par apna ek hath rkhta hua bola ....... bikhre aarmano ko sath sanjoye hue me vha se nikal kar hospital ke bahar chla gya

hospital se bahar nikalte hue socha tha ki yha se sidhe ghar ke liye nikal jaunga par jaise hi bike par beth kar bike start karne vala tha , meri soch cahnge ho gaii or me bike se utarkar hospital ke bahar hi lgi bench par beth gya or sochne lga ki abb kru to kya kru ? aksha se kaise milu ?? kuch der baad vedant ka call aya or mene use sari baat batai jise sunkar use bhi dukh hua ... usne mujhe kaha ki me ghar aa jau , me bs usko ha kehkar call cut kar diya


bekhayali me ' me vha krib 2 ghante tak betha rha , en 2 ghanton me bhagwan se aksha ki good helth ke liye na jane kitni mannate manga ... ander hi ander me bahut ro rha tha tadap rha tha kyonki aaj hi ke din mujhe 2 shock lge jisne mujhe ander tak hila kar rkha diya ... abhi sham ke 4 : 00 baj rhe the or mene subah se roti ka ek nivalla bhi nhi khaya tha esliye pet me thodi gadbad hone lgi par mujhe eski bikul parva nhi thi ... me bas kaise bhi karke aksha se milna chahta tha , use dekhna chahta tha use mafi mangna chahta tha or aaj barso baad vapas jage beshumar pyar ko aksha se bya karna chahta tha


kuch der or bethe rehne ke baad me vapas ander gya ... jis ward me aksha admit thi vha koi nhi tha to me jaldi se us or teji se bda ... jab mene ward ke ander dekha to vha 3 patients ke bed the jis par patient lete hue the unme se ek bed par dono side aksha ke papa or uske jiju bethe hue the ... gate ka glass thoda purana tha esliye mujhe saff saff nhi dikh rha tha ...jab mene thoda karib hokar ander jhaka to mujhe meri jane jahan ka murjhaya hua chehra dikha ... use dekhkar me ander tak tadap gya ek baar fir sine ke left side me dard ubhar aya , dil kiya ki gate khol kar ander chla jau or meri dhadkan ko apne ander sma lu or use akhiri sans tak juda na kru


abhi mujhe yha aye hue muskil se 5 minuts hi hue honge ki mere kandhe par kisi ne hath rkha ... jab mene mudkar dekha to Arya ek nurse ke sath hath me medicine liye khda tha , me bina kuch bole bhigi palko ke sath vha se sidha ghar ke liye nikal gya .......... aaj ki raat meri life ki sabse dhukhdai taklofon se bhri raton me se ek thi jise mene bdi muskil se gujara


mujhe job se leave liye hue 5 din ho gye the esliye mere liye aaj job par jana bahut jaruri tha ... me ready hokar sabko byy boklar duty ke liye nikal gya vha jakar mere apni upasthiti darj karvai or 4 ghante duty karne ke baad bike leke nikal gya jaha mujhe jana tha yani mujhe 12 km dur us sheher me jana tha jaha aksha thi ... me hospital ke bahar bike stand karke ander chla gya jaha par aksha admit thi , jab mene ward ke ander dekha to vaha aksha ka bed khali tha

mene pass hi gujar rhi ek nurse se aksha ke bare me puch to pta chla ki uski condition ab thik hai esliye use general ward me shift kar diya gya ... aksha ki good health ke bare me sunkar me bahut khush hua or nurse se general ward ke bare puchkar unki batai hui jagah par chla gya , esi ummid me ki me aksha ko dekh sku or usse mil pau par aisa kuch nhi hua because jab me vha pahucha to dekha ki jis bed par aksha leti hui thi uske agal bagal me ek ladki ( vhi ladki jisne meri ek baar help ki thi jab me bike se gira tha ) or uske sath 2 ourte bethi hue thi , unme se ek aksha ki ma thi or dusri Arya ki ma jise me acchi trah se janta hu

mujhe es vakt aksha se milna thik nhi lga esliye me bahar chla gya ... kuch der tak bahar hi kal vali bench par beth gya , abhi mujhe kuch hi der hui ki mere bagal me aksha ke papa or jiju hokar gujre ... ek pal to aksha ke papa mujhe yha dekhkar thoda ruke fir gusse se dekhte hue vha se hospital ke ander chle gye ... me vha esi ummid me betha rha ki kab aksha ke papa bahar nikle or kab me ander jau or aksha se milu ... karib 1: 30 gante tak bhi aksha ke papa or uske relative bahar nhi aye tab me bujhe mann se vha se chla gya

room me akar ji bhar ke aksha ke parivar valo ko galiyan dene lga ki lawde ek pal ke liye bhi aksha ko akela nhi chhod rhe , jab dekho tab chipke rehte hai ... mere baichain dil ko kaha shanti milne vali thi so me raat ko hospital ke liye nikal gya esi ummid me ki raat ke time vo akeli hogi or hua bhi bilkul vaisa ... yani jab me aksha ke ward ke pass pahucha tab ander mujhe koi nhi dikha bs 5-7 bed the jis par patient lete hue the , aksha ne apne chehre par ek chadar oud rkhi thi .

abhi me ander jane hi vala tha ki mujhe kisi ke ane hi ahat hue so mene piche mudkar dekha to Aarya ek ladki jiski god me ek baccha bhi tha uske vo meri or aa rhe the ... mera to dimag ghunguna gya lawda mann kiya ki pass me rkhi table uske sarr par phod dalu but dil ke armaan dil me hi rehne diye or vhi gate ke pass bebak khda rha

arya mujhe es vakt yha dekh thoda hairan hua but jaldi normal hua or uske sath aai ladki ko ander bhej diya , mujhe thoda side me bula liya taki hamari baaton se ander patient disturb na ho

" tum es vakt yha kya kar rhe ho dhruba " shalinta se arya dhire se bola

" Aksha se milne aya hu , please pichli baaton ko bhulkar mujhe maaf karde or mujhe aksha se milne do , mera usse baat karna bahut jaruri hai " ... roni si surat banaye me bola , kya pta lawda pigal jaye meri halat par

" kya karoge mil kar ? kya bologe usse ? ab milne or kuch kehne se kuch nhi hone vala dhruva ... bahut bura kiya tum logo ne us bechari ke sath , aisa to koi apne dushmano ke sath bhi nhi karta " ...

" mujhe kuch nhi sunna , mujhe bs usse ek baar milna hai ... ye batao tum mujhe aksha se milne de rhe ho ya nhi ? " ... arya ki bato ki ignore karte hue me halke se chillaya

" me tumhe usse kaise milne du ? jabki uski es halat ke jimmedar sirf or sirf tum ho ! "... ye sunkar mera to dimag hi 360 digree angel tak ghum gya

" Me hu ? mene kya kiya ? " ... hairan hote hue me bola

" Aksha jab dubara apne ghar aai thi tab me or uncle hi use lene gye the or jab use ghar laye tab uska rudan dekha nhi gya mujhse ... us vakt aksha ki halt ko shabdo me bya nhi kar sakta , bahut mushkil se use sambhala tha humne ... usi din aksha ne sab kuch bta diya tha hume ki shadi se bhagne ke baad uske sath kya kya hua , Varun ne us masoom ke sath bahut galat kiya par tum ? tum to aksha se pyar karte the na fir aksha ke etne kehne par bhi uski baat par vishwash kyo nhi kiya ? ek baar bhi tumhare dil ne ye nhi kaha ki aksha sach bol rhi hai ... tune heartless hokar aksha ko ander tak tod diya ... tu bhle hi use apnane se mna kar deta , vo thik tha but uski pavitrata par swal utha kar uske dil ko dhes pahuchai " ... ab me kya bolta bs arya ki baat sunta rha


" pehle vo kaise rehti thi pta nhi but jab se apne ghar par aii tab se bs ek zinda sharir banke reh rhi hai vo ... jo aksha kabhi ghanto humse bate kiya karti thi vo aksha ghar ane ke baad chup chup si rehne lgi , thik dhang se khana bhi nhi khati vo or esi vajah se uska shari kamjor pad gya jiske chalte aaj vo hospital me admit hai "...



kuch der ruk kar fir bola ..." Aksha aaj bhi tumse utna hi pyar karti hai jitna pehle karti thi ... jab vo ghar se bhagi uske 3 din pehle usne mujhe kaha ki vo tumse bahut pyar karti hai or shadi bhi tumse hi karna chahti hai , ye jankar mujhe bahut bda dhakka lga ... us pal mann me ye vichar bhi aye ki tumhe maar du , me bhi kabhi aksha se bahut pyar karta tha to bhla uske muhh se kaise dusre ke liye pyar karne ki baat sun leta ? mene bs yhi sochkar kisi ko nhi bataya ki shadi ke baad aksha sab kuch bhul kar meri ho jayegi but hua kya ? ... kahi na kahi me bhi aksha ki halat ka jimmedar rha hu or tumhara bhi eskiye ho ske to mujhe maaf kar dena "... kehte hue aarya ki ankhe bhi thodi namm ho gaii ... mujhe to pehle hi apni bevkufiyon par bahut ro chuka hu ... kal ka or aaj ka din mere liye kaise ghujra ye me hi janta hu


" Bahut galat kiya mene aksha se sath , us vakt mere dimag ne kamm karna band kar diya tha or aksha ke jane se dil to marr chuka tha ... agar vedant mujhe sacchai nhi batata to mujhe kabhi ye bhi pta nhi chalta ki aksha ne aaj din tak sirf mujhse pyar kiya ... me use apni galti ki mafi mangne hi kal ki trah aaj bhi aya hu "... kehkar me chupp ho gya ...... arya ke puchne par mene short me varun or vedant vala incident us bta diya jise sunkar usne dukh jataya


vedant se baat karne ke baad mujhe pta chla ki uske sath aai vo ladki uski wife hai or uske sach vo baccha bhi unhi ka hai ... arya ki wife esi hospital me ek docter hai or vo es vakt aksha se milne vali hai ... arya ne ye bhi bataya ki aksha ki halat ab pehle se kafi behtar hai or use 3 din bad yha se discharge kar diya jayega ... ye sunkar rote , bilakhte , tadapte dil ko bahut sukoon mila


5 minutes baad arya ki wife bahar aai tab arya ne use mere bare me bataya , usne bhi mujhe fatkara par mujhe eski koi parvahh nhi thi .. mujhe to jald se jald aksha se milna tha or mere chahat ke bare me us docterni ko bataya to usne kaha ki abhi use davaiyan di gai hai so me abhi na milkar baad me milu ... khair me khush tha ki kam kam se aaj me aksha se milunga to sahi , vha se me arya ke sath hospital ke bahar aa gaye , arya ne khane ko pucha to me bhi mna nhi kar paya kyonki kal bhi mene kuch bhi nhi khaya or aj subhe bhi poha khakar din nikala so bhukh joro se lagi hue thi esliye me or arya pass ke hi ek dhabbe me chle gya jaha humne pet bharke khana kyaya

ghante bhar baad arya mujhe best of luck bolkar chla gya or me abnormal dhadakte dil ke sath aksha ke pass chla gya jaha meri jane jahan sine tak chadar dale so rhi thi ... bina palke jhapkaye me dhire dhire uske karib chla gya or or ektak aksha ke masoom chehre ko dekhne lga jis chehre ki muskurahat mene chinn li thi ... use es halat me dekh kar meri ankhe bhar aai , me vhi uske bed ke bilkul karib ghutno ke baal beth gya


mene kamte hatho se aksha ka hath thama , uski chuvan se hi mera pura sharir jhanjhna gya mano pure sharir me currunt ki tikhi leher doud gaii ho ... mere chune se uske sharir ne thodi harkat hue ... mann kiya ki aksha ko uthakar use jo bhi kehna hai keh dalu par dil ke kisi kone se awaj aai ki nhi use sone du ... mene apna ek hath aksha ke hath se hatakar uske chere par aaa rhi balo ki lato ko bdi savdhani se piche kiya or vapas uska hath tham liya


" I..i really s..sorry Aksha , pta hai mene tumhare sath jo bhi kiya vo mafi layak bhi nhi hai fir bhi me mafi manguga or tab tak manta rahunga jab tak tum mujhe maff na kardo ... halaton ne mere dil ko pathar ka bna diya tha jisse kabhi tumhari baton ka vishwash nhi kiya , sayad mere pyar me hi koi kami rehh gaii tabhi to me tumhare pavitra pyar ko samajh nhi paya ... par ye bhi sacch hai ki tumhare viyog me ' me bhi tumhari trah bahut tadpa hu , kai kai rate jagkar gujari hai tumhari yadon me " ... mere bolne ki awaj etni dhimi thi ki sayad gate tak bhi nhi ja rhi hogi ... me abhi kuch nhi bolna chahta tha but etne time se mere dil me umad rhe jajbaat bahar nikal hi aye


abhi me kuch or bolta usse pehle hi 2 nurses ward me ghuss aai or mujhe bahar jane ko kaha but mene unhe samjha bujhakar kuch der yhi rehle ko mna liya or kuch der bad vo chali gai ... mene pass me hi rkha ek stull utha kar aksha ke bed ke karib rkhkar us par beth gya or ek baar fir aksha ka hath thamm kar use masoom khubsurat chehre ko dekhne lga ... use dekhte hue me apni purani yadon me es kadar kho gya ki kab vhi sarr rkh kar so gya pta hi nhi chla


subhe meri tab khuli jab kisi ne mere kandhe ko hilaya ... mene apna sar utha kar piche dekha to vha aksha ke dad or jiju khde the jiska hath ab bhi mere kandhe par tha ... meri to bina muhh dhoye hi ning 9-2-11 ho gaii , jab mene gardan ghumakar samne dekha to aksha apne sar ke piche 2-3 takiye lagaye adhi leti bhav sunya hokar kabhi mujhe dekti to kabhi apne papa or jiju ki or ... mene ab bhi aksha ke hath ko apne dono hath me thamm rkha tha ... ek pal ke liye mera mind block ho gya par jald hi mene aksha ka hath chhoda or stull se uthkar bina kuch bole bahar chla gya or ek rahat ki sans li


vha se me sidha room ki or nikal gya or naha dhokar bank duty ke liye nikal gya ... kal ke mukable aaj me khush tha , hota bhi kyo nhi kal raat anjane me hi sahi par puri raat aksha ke sath jo gujari thi ......... jaise taise raat gujari , me agle din fir aksha se milne ko socha but mere dil or diamg ne saff mna kar diya esliye mene idea drop kiya or intezaar karne lga us dil ka jis din aksha swasth ho jayegi


5-7 din or gujar gye es bich mujhe pta chla ki aksha ko bhi discharge kar diya gya hai ye jankar me bahut khush tha ... ab me usse jald se jald milna chahta tha but kaise milu ? , abhi me bank me computer ke samne betha yhi soch rha tha ... himmat karke mene aksha call lga hi diya but call uski sister ne uthaya esliye mene bina kuch bole call cut kar diya


agle din bhi mene call kiye but no responce , me use bar bar call karke pareshan nhi karna chahta tha esliye mene soch liya ki ab kisi trah sidha usse milunga ... or esi milne ki asha me mene 7 din or bita diye but koi jugad nhi betha ... mene aarya ki madad lene ka socha or usi vakt use call lga diya but us bhosdiwale ne bhi kuch din or wait karne ko bola , me bhi kya karta ? na to aksha ghar chhod ke bahar jati or na hi me diract uske ghar ja sakta or agar chla bhi gya to uska baap meri gand mar deta


kal se bank ke karmachariyon ne hadtal ke chalte bank ko band kar rkha tha so me aaj ghar par hi baby or Aaryan ( mera bhatija ) ke sath masti kar rha tha tabhi mera phone ring hua or jab mene incoming call dekhi to hairan ho gya kyonki call aksha ne kiya tha ... me khushi me etna pagal ho gya ki call hi pick nhi kar paya yani mere call pick karne se pehle hi phone ring hona band ho gya ... mujhe khud par hi behad gussa ane lga , khair me call vapas karne hi vala tha ki aksha ne hi call kar diya or es baar miksil se 2 baar ring hua hoga

" H..Hello "

" Aksha " .. kampte honthe se me budbudaya

" Tumne mujhe maaf kar diya na dhruva ? " ... larajti awaj me aksha boli , kaise ladki hai ye ? ab bhi bina galti ke apni galti mann rhi hai

" I wanna meet you aksha , please mna matt karna nhi to me ji nhi paunga ... milkar tumse bahut kuch kehna chahta , mere dil me bhre boj ko halka karna chahta hu " ... ruasa hokar fir bola ... " Tum milogi na mujhse ? bolo aksha ! milogi na ? " ... kehte hue ankhe me pani ubhar aya


" M..me abhi tumhare pass aa rhi hua dhruva " ... thodi der ruk'kar fir boli ..." Tum mujhe dantoge to nhi na ? " ...uske swal ne meri ankhon me thehri bundo ko jamil par la patka ,\sath hi mera pura badan shihar gya


" SORRY aksha mene tumhe bahut taklif pahunchai ... me tumhara choti pahadi ke pass nadi kinare intezaar karunga " ... anshu saff karte hue me bola


" Me vhi hu dhruva " ... ye sunte hi mere hath se phone girte girte bcha ... fir khud ko sambhala or bola


" I LOVE YOU AKSHA , me Aa rha hu tumhare pass " ... kehkar mene call cut kar diya or jaldi se bike leke nikal gya meri dilruba se milne , pure raste bs yhi socha ja rha tha ki aksha se kya bat karunga


jaha aksha thi vha bike nhi ja sakti thi esliye mene usse 100 meter dur hi bike rok ke teji se uski or bad chla ... chalte hue meri najar nadi kinare bde se pathar par pdi jis par aksha bethi hue thi or bina edher udhar dekhe nadi me behte shant nirman pani ki dharao ko dekhe ja rhi thi ... me usse 5 meter ki duri par jakar ruk gya or bina halchal kiye use dekhne lga



" AA..AKSHA "... dhire se larajti awaj me mene use pukara , meri awaj sunkar usne meri taraf najar dali or turant apni jagah par uth khadi hui ... me dhire dhire uske pass gya , meri dhadkan normal speed se kai guna chalne lgi yha tak , anayas hi mere dono hath ki muthiya band ho gai ... me bs ektak aksha ko dekhna lga same aksha bhi bina palke jhapkaye mujhe dekhne lgi

" kaisi ho aksha ? " ... chhupi todte hue mene kaha


' Achi hu "... ruk kar fir boli ... " dhruva kya tumne mujhe maff kar diya ? " ... apni gardan jhukaye aksha boli ... aksha ke swal se mere dil me dard ki ek leher si uthi


" mafi mang kar mujhe sharminda matt kro aksha , tum par shakk karke mene apni zindagi ki sabse badi galti ki jiski saja mere sath tumhe bhi mili ... i'm realy sorry aksha , mujhe tumhe taklif di , tumhara bahut baar dil dukhaya tum par shakk kiya , mene jo tumhare sath kiya vo mafi ke layak to nhi hai fir bhi ho ske to mujhe maff kar de ... I promise me fir kabhi tumhara dil nhi dukhaunga " ... kehte hue meri ankhon me thodi nami aa gai


" Me tumse kabhi naraj nhi hui dhruva , ha tumhari kadvi baton se bahut taklif hoti thi mujhe , jab bhi tumhari kahi hui bate yaad ati tab bahut rona ata hai ... par mujhe apne pyar or bhagwan par pura vishwash tha ki kabhi na kabhi tumhe realize jarur hoga ki mene tumhe kabhi dhokha nhi diya " ... bolte hue aksha bhi ruasi ho gaii , uski ankho se anshu girne se pehle hi usne poch dale


" Me pagal tha aksha or bevkuf bhi jo har vakt tumhe dosh deta rha ... jab mujhe galatfehemi hui ki tum mujhse nhi balki varun se pyar karti ho or tumne varun ke kehne par mere sath or mere dil ke jajbaton ke sath khela ye jankar me bahut tut gya tha ... bahut roya me tumhe yadd karke , mujhe jab bhi varun ki kahi hui bate yaad ati tab tab mujhe tum par or khudd par gussa ata ki mene tumse pyar kyo kiya ? " ...


ankhon me aai nami ko saff karte hue me fir bola .. " dhire dhire mera pyar nafrat me badal gya , mene tumhe bhulne ki har mumkin koshish ki par kabhi tumhara name tumhara chera or tumhare sath bitaye vakt ko kabhi bhul nhi paya ... ek baar kisi se pyar ho jaye na to use dil se nikalna mushkil hota hai ... mene tumhe apne dimag se nikala par dil se kabhi nikal paya ... socha tha ki tumhe bhula dunga to sab khatam ho jayega par ye kabhi nhi hua or na kabhi hoga balki hum dono ke marne ke baad bhi nhi ... because tum mere dimag me nhi balki dil me rehti ho jisko tumne us vakt apna bna liya jis din mene tumhe pehli baar dekha tha " ... etna bolkar me shant ho gya kyonki agge or bolne ki mere me himmat na rhi , awaj rundh si gai


" Jo bhi hua use bhul jao dhruva , bita vakt hume dukh dard or taklif ke siva kuch nhi dega ... bs yhi malal rehega ki hamara pyar bahut der baad mukkammal hua , jab se mene pyar ke bare me jana tabse mere dil ne sirf or sirf tumhe chaha or vo chahat badte din ke sath badti gaii ... me tumhe bahut pehle hi batana chahti thi mere dil me tumhare liye kitni chahat hai par kabhi himmat nhi hui , me bs esi ummid me rehti thi ki kab tum mujhse IJHAAR -E-MOHABBAT kro or kab meri tadap khatam ho ... jab tumne mujhe ijhaar kiya vo pal meri zindagi ka sabse khubsurat pal tha , kabhi socha nhi tha ki hame pyar ko pane ke liye etni mushkilo se hokar ghujna padega "...


" meri galti se hi hum dono etna tadpe , nhi to hamara pyar bahut pehle mukkammal ho jata sayad hamari kismat ko bhi yhi manjoor tha ... aaj me bahut khush hu ki tum meri zindagi me fir aa gai ho .... I LOVE YOU AKSHA . LOVE YOU SO MUCH , bahut pyar karta hu me tumse ... tum mere dil ki dhadkan ho aksha , I can't live without you ... kya tum meri IJHAAR-E-MOHABBAT kubul karti ho ? ... naam ankho ke sath mene apne hath failate hue kaha or intezaar karne lga aksha ke javab or meri bahon me sma jane ka


'' Es pal ka na jane mene kabse intezaar kiya ... I LOVE YOU TOO DHRUVA . LOVE YOU SO MUCH ...me tumhare IJHAAR-E-MOHABBAT ko kubul karti hu " ... kehte hue aksha thodi agge bdi or meri bahon me sma gaii or apne apne hath meri pith par lapet liye ... aksha ke aparsh karte hi meri ankhe band ho gai or usme thehri anshuo ki bunde uske kande par giri ... dhire dhire hum dono ki kasavat or majboot ho gai mano dono ek dusre ke zism me sma jana chahte hue


kuch der tak hum dono gale mile rhe tabhi mujhe aksha ke sisakne ki awaj sunai di to mene use alag karna chaha par uski giraft etni majbut thi ki me use khudse alag nhi kar paya ... kuch der baad jab uski pakad thodi dhili hui tab mene uske dono kandhe ko pakadkar use alag kiya , vo ab bhi sisak rhi thi pura chehra anshuo se bhiga hua tha ye sab dekh kar mera dil bhi ro pda


" kya hua ? tum ro kyo rhi ho ? " ... uski ankho se anshu pochkar me bola


" mujhe khudse kabhi juda na karna dhruva ! bahut tadpi hu me tumhare bina , ab tak tumara pyar pane ke liye hi zinda rhi ... agar tum mujhse kabhi alag hue to me mar jaungi dhruva , bahut pyar karti hu tumse , sabse jyada apni jaan se bhi jyada ... me apni haar dhadkan tumhare name kar di hai , agar tum firse dur chle gye to ye dhadkan dhadkna band ho jayegi ... mujhe apni bna lo dhruva . mujhse shadi karlo ... ab me tumse orr dur nhi rehh sakti " ... kehkar aksha fir mujhe lipat gai , mene bhi dubara use apni agosh me le liye


abhi me khudko duniya ka sabse khusnashib samajh rha ki mujhe aksha mujhe etna pyar karti hai or badnashib bhi ki meri bevkufi vajah se aksha se dur rha


" Akhiri sans tak tumse pyar karunga , tumhe etna pyar dunga ki tum sare gham bhul jaogi ... tum to meri dhadkann ho aksha or bhla koi insan bina dhadkan ke kaise zinda rehh sakta hai ? hum dono bahut jald shadi bhi kar lenge thik hai .... ab rona band kro kyonki tumhara rona mujhse dekha nhi jata and i promise ki aaj ke baad kabhi tumhari ankhe me anshu nhi ane dunga " ... uske reshmi balo me hath ferte hue me bola ... dhire dhire aksha ne bhi rona band kar diya or mujhse alag ho gaii ...mene unka chahra apne hath me thama or ek kiss uske mathe par kiya or ek ek usko dono ankhon par bhi kiya or last me ek bahut chota sa kiss uske pankhudi jaise gulabi mulayam honthom par bhi kiya ... mere alag hote hi aksha ne sharmakar apni gardan niche karli , uska dudh sa safed chehra lal ho gya


aksha bhi meri synoms thi so vo kaha piche rehne vali so usne bhi apna pyar jatane ke liye bari bari mere forhead dono galo par or last me mere honthon par kiss kiya or mujhse gale mill gaii ..... alag hokar hum dono nadi ke kinare us bde pathar ke pass beth gye ... aksha ne apna sar mere kandhe par tika diya or samne behti nadi ko dekhne lgi

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15 din baad me bhaiya or bhabhi baccho ke sath khana kha rhe the tab bhaiya ne mujhse vo news sunai jise sunkar mere gale me khana fass gya kyonki news hi kuch aisi thi ... bhaiya ne kaha ki aaj aksha ke papa or aarya ke papa aksha or tumhare rishtey ki baat karne aye the ... fir kya tha me khushi se jhum utha or bhaiya ko gale lga liya ... mere liye aksha se shadi karne me sabse badi mushibat mere bina kuch kiye samapt ho gaii
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akhir vo ghadi bhi aa gai jis ghadi me ' me or aksha shadi ke pavitra bandan me bandan gaye or dono ne sath jine ki kasam khai ( marne ki nhi ) or hum dono hamesha hamesha ke liye ek ho gye ... 2 sal baad aksha ne ek ladke ko janm diya ... me ek baccha or chahta tha pur aksha ne mna kar diya ki vo ab or bacche ko janm nhi degi balki anath ashram me se ek ladki ko adopt karegi ... bhla me meri jaan ki baat kaise nhi manta ? aksha ke kehne ke 1 mahine baad hi humne anath ashram se ek ladki ko adopt kar liya ... hasi khushi hum sab zindagi jine lge


the end
Aakhir kaar itni saari paresaniyon ke baad dona ko unka pyar mil gaya
HAPPY ENDING
CONGRATULATIONS for completing the story &
Thanks for lovely story
 

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Izhar – a – Mohabbat, kahani ke naam se hi pata chal jaata hai ke Kahani mein Mohabbat to hogi par locha hoga uska izhaar karne mein...

Maine aksar dekha hai ke sahi samay par apne Pyaar ka izhaar na karne par takleef aur dard ke siwa kuchh nahi milta... Arre yaar kam se kam izhaar to karo, zyada se zyada reject hi ho jaaoge, par kya pata accept kar liye jaao... Agar rejection milti hai to uska utna dukh nahi hota jitna ke izhaar na kar paane ke baad hota hai....

Dhruv ka bhi yahi chakkar hai... Aksha ko uss ladke ke saath dekh kar apne aap hi andaaze lagane lag gaya... Jabki wo family friend tha.... Dhruv ke character se ab tak yahi lagta hai ke Iss se naa ho paayega...

Haan ek soorat mein iska ishq bhi rang laa sakta hai. Agar Vedant sacha mitr bankar bichauliya ban jaaye....:laugh::laugh::laugh:

Par thread ke naam (sad and bad love story) se to yahi lagta hai ke dukhon ke samandar mein kashti behne waali hai iski.... Dhruv ke liye chand lines...

Izhar tu kar deta,
To wo tujhe tanha naa karti.
Tu waqt par Ikraar karta,
to wo kisi aur ko kubool naa karti.

Waise jo pehle update mein pahadi par baithne waala scene tha wo shayad future ka nazrana tha... Aur usse padhkar laga ke Dhruv shayad sach mein bahot der kar gaya...

Aarzoo to hai ke IZHAAR A MOHABBAT kiya jaaye...
lekin kya karen,
Jazbaat to hain par ye Alfaaz kahaan se laayen...

Outstanding writing bhai... Waise to sad love stories padhne se meri bahut phat ti hai :laughing::laughing::laughing: par aapki iss kahani ko padhne se khud ko rok nahi paaya.... Amazing just amazing....

:yourock::yourock::yourock::yourock::yourock:

iss kahani mein shab ek doosre se jhooth bolte hain kyun,,, kyunki wo ek doosre kee bhalai chahte hain... abe saalo band karo itna bhala karna... inhi bhalai ke chakkar mein hi toh sala durgati ho gayee dono law***o kee... ek hospital mein hain aur doosra hospital jaa raha hain( abe milne)... wo toh achha tha kee aksha kee behen ko bhalai karne ka shauk nahin tha nahin toh aur maza aata...

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chalo ab thori burai karte hain...

yeh jhutiya dhruva itna jhooth bolne se man nahin bhara kee usko jail mein bhi jaa ke jhooth bolta raha... aare tere divorce kee khabar sun ke kaun so wo faasi pe latak jata... lekin nahin inhe bhalai jo karni thee....

yeh vedant isko itni bhali kee pari thee ke dost kee halat nahin pata chal rahi thee... kee jhutiya bina sharab piye hi sharabi se hi badtar halat kiye jaa raha hain khud ka... khair wo toh achha tha jailor ko bhalai soojhi jo jaldi bahar nikal diya nahin toh andar hi rahte rahte idhar iski beti kee shaadi ho chuki hoti...

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chalo ab thora royega thora pitega ( abe baapu aksha ke ,,, ya phir uska pehla lober) thora glycerine waale aansoon bahayega... tab jaa ke aksha bed se uth jayegi... waise wo seth jee jinhone dhruva ko jail mein thuswaya tha wo log nahin aaye... waise agar ladki ghar se bhaag jaye toh izzatdar khandan kehne waale log ladki ke saath rishta tor dete hain...

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a emotional one.. underarm se paisne nikal gaye padhte padhte...

ohh to akshay is haalat ki wajah bhi wo dhruva hi hai.... waise arya ne thik hi to kaha tha ke agar dhruva ka pyar sachha hi tha , agar sach he dil se chaahta hi tha to ye vishwas kyun nahi kiya aksha pe....
Bus stop pe wo aata tha aksha ke piche, aksha ke piche wo pata tha na ki aksha... phir usiki life mein ghuske usiki life ko barbad karne jurrat kyun ki...

aur yahan galti bhi dhruva ki taraf se hi tha, matlab uske best friend varun ne aksha ka wo haal kya.... agar aksha dhruva ke pyar mein nahi padti to shayad uski jindagi kitni khubsurat hoti...
Dhruv se pyar karke kya mila ushe,...taane, ruswayi , gaaliya, beijjati ke alawa kuch bhi to nahi...
Baat ek do din ki bhi nahi...baat ek do mahine ki bhi nahi...Balki itne saalon tak wo ye sab sahti rahi just because usne dhruva ko dilo jaan se pyar karti thi...
Damn it ...hospital pahuchake hi dum liya us kambakht ne...

meri nazar mein dhruva jaisa chutiya matlabi insaan kisi bhi taraf se, kisi bhi tarah se aksha ke kabil nahi.... isliye is story ka end mujhe pasand nahi... bas baat khatam...

Moral of the story...... Pyar andha hota hai :roflol:

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Khair kuch tarif writer sahab ki lekhni ko leke...

Kahani jaise lage ki garmiyon ke mausam ke baad baarish ka mausam aa gaya ho.. ek suchana ehsaas ke sath... jaise Saawan jo shuru ho chuka hai. Jaise is khushnuma shaam mein meghon ne apni hunkar lagani shuru kardi. barish ke sath sath Dilon dimag mein ek shaanti cha gai ho...aur wo bearish bundo jaise shabd jaise mitti se mil khushboo is kadar faila di ki maahol ek traha romanchit ho uthta ho..
kahani har pehlu jaise hare bhare paido ke hare patton se paani ki bunde hathkeliyan karte huye zameen mei samajhati ho.
Aapki lekhni jaise ek anokha karishma hai..... ki likhe gaye shabdo mein jaane kitne rang dikhaate hai, padhte waqt lage ki kirdaar aur unki gatividhiya jaise kabhi aasmaani barf ban kar to kabhi aasmani aag ban kar, kabhi jhadte patton ka khel, to kabhi aag aur paani ka mel, to kabhi baarish barsati hai to kahi bijuri kadkaati hai, kahin aag barsaati hai,.. aur kya batau aapko Kingfisher sahab ki aapki lekhni hai aisi nirali.... jaise saralata ke sath varnan ki gayi mann moh dene wali koi Kavita ho...

Shaandar update, shaandar lekhni shaandar shabdon ka chayan aur sath hi dilkash kirdaaro ki bhumika bhi...

Let's see what happens next
Brilliant storyline with awesome writing skills :applause: :applause:

Agar pure story ki baat kare To mujhe bas 2 update pasand aaye hai ...first and last ..indono update me laga jaise wo insan hai ,wo bhi kuchh soch sakte hai, reaction de sakte hai..baki sare update aise the jaise wo koi insan nhi game ke character ho ..jab marji Jo Kara liye..unhe alag Kar do aur tab Tak kiye raho jab Tak man na bhare aur phir Mila do ,aur wo yantrawat mil bhi jayenge ..how stupid..main character ka koi apna soch nhi hai ,wo koi decision nhi le sakte ,stand nhi le sakte...to phir wo Kya Kar sakte hai...kingu tu ye kahakar baat nhi taal sakta ki hero ko akal der se aayi...ye kahana bachakana bate lagegi ,joki mujhe tumse ummid nhi hai..mujhe shuru me laga dhruva ke anadar thoda dabbupan hai , wo der se baate samajhata hai ...lekin ant aate aate Mai samajh gaya ki problem dhruva me nhi hai ,usse aisa banaya gaya hai jaha uski kisi ko bhi fark nhi ,yaha Tak khud writer ne bhi usse apne fantasy ke liye bharapur istemal Kiya hai ..lekin yaha gadbad fantasy pura karna nhi hai yaha gadbad ye hai ki writer ne main character se koi Matlab hi nhi rakha wo bas unse apna manchaha kaam karwane laga..jabki Mera manana hai ki writer jab Tak character ke sath rishta nhi bana leta wo tab Tak charactero ke sath wo nyay nhi Kar pata Jo ek writer ko karna chahiye...iss story me years aise beet rahe the mano jaise months..aur main character pata nhi kis duniya me ji rahe the ...unhe to pata hi nhi chalata tha ki Kai years betate ja rhe hai ...ye to hue wo baate Jo mujhe lagi ki ye kami thi..


Lekin agar baat Kare updates ki to jaisa ki dikhaya gaya hai ki dhruva aur aksha akasar Nadi kinare milte the..aur dikhaya gaya hai ki dhruva ki perpose Karne me phat rhi hai...Chalo ye thik hai..lekin ek baat ye bhi Satya hai ki Kai baar baate bina bole hi samane Wala sabkuchh samajh jate hai..to bina perpose kiye bhi unke bich wo rishta ban Jana chahiye tha ...

Ab aate hai aage to dekhate hai ki Varun ne jhoot bola ki akasha usse pyar karti hai , aur ye maan bhi liya ..wow great...ye wali bakchodi mujhe palle nhi padi..agar aksha Varun se pyar karti hoti to wo jarur Kai baar apne baato me Varun ka jikra karti rahti..uski tarife karti rahti...aisa to ho hi nhi sakata ki koi larki kisi se pyar Kare aur apne dosto ko uski tarife na sunaye ..ye ladako par bhi lagu hota hai...khud dhruva aksha ki baate karta rhata tha apne dosto se...so ye wali bakchodi mere palle nhi padi...

Khair jab dhruva ko pata Chala ki aksha waha hai to wo kyo nhi gaya waha..joki ek normal ghatna hoti ye ki koi girl/ boys apne pyar me mile bewfai ke baare me samane wale se confront na kare...
Khair aage dekhane par pate hai ki dhruva shadi Kar liya , lekin usake sath khush na hone ke Karan talak ho jata hai...Matlab ye kya chutiyapa hai..
Aksha se pyar bhi hai ..aur koi kosis bhi nhi ...
Aur jab aksha finally dhruva se milti hai to ek aur kahani samane aati hai..jisme aksha ye kahti hai ki Varun ne usse manipulate Kiya ..what the hell ..agar usne kaha hai ki dhruva ko jail hui hai to wo mil bhi to sakti thi dhruva se..ya pure 1 years ke gap me ek baar dhruva ke gharwalo par call bhi to Kar sakti thi... after all wo itna busy bhi nhi thi ki wo dhruva ke baare me janane ki ek kosis bhi nhi Kar sakti thi...yaha par iasa laga jaise aksha ek machine hai , Jo Jo chahe wo karwa sakta hai..koi aksha koi decision le hi nhi sakti...
Aage wahi ki jab pata Chala sachchai tab Tak tumahari shadi ho chuki thi bla bla bla...fuck off
Ab agar ham bedant ko dekhe to wo bhi chutiya hi nikla ...Chalo man liya ki uske hatho Varun Mara gaya , to wo jail Jane se bacha kyo nhi..Ghar me eklota kamane Wala larka tha..abhi ek beta hua tha , nayi nayi shadi hui thi...lekin usse bhi Kya fark parta hai ..uska apna koi bhi emotion hi nhi hai...wo bhi bas ek machine style me kaam karta Chala gaya..jaise mano wo uska task that..

Aur last me batata hai ki mujhe sachchai ka pata tha lekin Maine ye baat chhupayi thi ...lekin kyo iska reason ekdam ghatiya ki Mai tumahare shadishuda jivan me darar nhi Lana chahata tha...how foolish na ...jabki ye baate janana dhruva ka hak tha..lekin iss story ke charactero ka kya hi kahana jab Tak unko command nhi Diya jata tab Tak wo apana munh nhi kholanege..
Khair ant bhala to sab bhala...
Nice story ..keep it...farar story par update ane ki ummid karte hai...

lovely ending 😍..
to aksha kamjor ho gayi thi kyunki khana peena kam kar diya tha usne jabse wo ghar laut ke aayi thi aur khudko gunahgar mehsus kar rahi thi dhruva ka ..
waise arya ne sahi kaha ki agar dhruva ka pyar sachcha hota to wo aksha par vishwas karta par dhruva bhi apne pareshaniyo se gujra tha to vishwas karna thoda mushkil ho hi jaata hai ..
hospital me aksha ke saath kuch waqt bitane ko mil hi gaya tha dhruva ko par uske theek hone par usse mil hi nahi paaya aur na hi call kar paaya ..
par aakhir aksha ne hi call karke usko pahadi par bula liya aur dono ne apne gile shikwe dur kar liye ..
aur aakhir me sachche pyar ki jeet ho hi gayi 😍😍😍..
aksha aur dhruva ek ho gaye .

in dono ke pyar ka dushman sirf ek hi tha jo sabse bada kamina nikla dosti ke naam par 😡..
warna itna tadapna nahi padta dono ko ..

maja aa gaya kahani padhke aur dono ka pyar pura hote dekhkar 😍..

Aakhir kaar itni saari paresaniyon ke baad dona ko unka pyar mil gaya
HAPPY ENDING
CONGRATULATIONS for completing the story &
Thanks for lovely story

aap sabhi ka bahut bahut shukriya :chinki2:kahani ke sath end tak jude rehne ke liye ... apke smarthan ke bina ye story sayad complete nhi ho pati

ummid hai ki ye kahani apko thodi bahut pasand aai hogi ....

ye kahani me jab 12 th me tha tab mere bhai ke dost ne sunai thi jo ki bilkut true thi ... me chahta to reality me kuch fair badal kar kuch intresting add karke kahani ko majhedar bna sakta tha jisme kahani ke main cherecter ekdum perfect ho jaisa hum kahaniyon me padte hai .. but mene jaisa suna tha usi ke according kahani ko shabdo me piroya ... mene bs aise hi time pass ke liye likhta tha , socha nhi tha ki ese kabhi forum par post karunga becoz xf ke readers ke liye jo mirch mashala chahiye hota hai vo esme nhi tha fir bhi time pass ke liye post kar diya

duniya me etne log hai . unme jyadatar well perfect insan hai to kuch thode unmature hote hai jaise aksha or dhruva the .. jinki bevkufiya kahani me saff jhalki .. mujhe bhi unme kamiya lgi vo bhi bahut . khastour par unki mentality and decision ... usi ke karan unko etna kuch bhugatna pda khair kehte hai na ki aant bhla to sab bhla

11 ster fan tumhare first &last review ne bahut majhedar tha ... rhi baat farrar story karne ki to abhi bilkul time nhi hai ... ye story bhi me nhi post karta agar mere pass pehle se save update nhi hote .. exam ke baad dekhenge ki story restart karni hai ya nhi ... but usse pehle me ek thriller story post karunga jiske bare me mene Naina ji ko bahut pehle keh chuka hu ... ab likhne ka thoda Experience hai or kahani ka plot bhi mujhe mast lga to bilkul kahani majhedar hogi .. bahut jald uska promo tumhe pm karunga

end last sabka ek baar fir se dhanyavad . milte hai thote lambe vakt ke baad ek new thriller kahani ke sath .. tab tak apna or apne parivar valo ka khayal rakhiyega :love3: byy byy
 
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Hello everyone.

We are Happy to present to you The annual story contest of XForum


"The Ultimate Story Contest" (USC).

Jaisa ki aap sabko maloom hai abhi pichhle hafte hi humne USC ki announcement ki hai or abhi kuch time pehle Rules and Queries thread bhi open kiya hai or Chit Chat thread toh pehle se hi Hind section mein khula hai.

Well iske baare mein thoda aapko bata dun ye ek short story contest hai jisme aap kisi bhi prefix ki short story post kar sakte ho, jo minimum 700 words and maximum 7000 words (Story ke words count karne ke liye is tool ka use kare — Characters Tool) . Isliye main aapko invitation deta hun ki aap is contest mein apne khayaalon ko shabdon kaa roop dekar isme apni stories daalein jisko poora XForum dekhega, Ye ek bahot accha kadam hoga aapke or aapki stories ke liye kyunki USC ki stories ko poore XForum ke readers read karte hain.. Aap XForum ke sarvashreshth lekhakon mein se ek hain. aur aapki kahani bhi bahut acchi chal rahi hai. Isliye hum aapse USC ke liye ek chhoti kahani likhne ka anurodh karte hain. hum jaante hain ki aapke paas samay ki kami hai lekin iske bawajood hum ye bhi jaante hain ki aapke liye kuch bhi asambhav nahi hai.

Aur jo readers likhna nahi chahte woh bhi is contest mein participate kar sakte hain "Best Readers Award" ke liye. Aapko bas karna ye hoga ki contest mein posted stories ko read karke unke upar apne views dene honge.

Winning Writer's ko well deserved Awards milenge, uske alawa aapko apna thread apne section mein sticky karne ka mouka bhi milega taaki aapka thread top par rahe uss dauraan. Isliye aapsab ke liye ye ek behtareen mouka hai XForum ke sabhi readers ke upar apni chhaap chhodne ka or apni reach badhaane kaa.. Ye aap sabhi ke liye ek bahut hi sunehra avsar hai apni kalpanao ko shabdon ka raasta dikha ke yahan pesh karne ka. Isliye aage badhe aur apni kalpanao ko shabdon mein likhkar duniya ko dikha de.

Entry thread 7th February ko open hoga matlab aap 7 February se story daalna shuru kar sakte hain or woh thread 25th February tak open rahega is dauraan aap apni story post kar sakte hain. Isliye aap abhi se apni Kahaani likhna shuru kardein toh aapke liye better rahega.

Aur haan! Kahani ko sirf ek hi post mein post kiya jaana chahiye. Kyunki ye ek short story contest hai jiska matlab hai ki hum kewal chhoti kahaniyon ki ummeed kar rahe hain. Isliye apni kahani ko kayi post / bhaagon mein post karne ki anumati nahi hai. Agar koi bhi issue ho toh aap kisi bhi staff member ko Message kar sakte hain.



Story se related koi doubt hai to iske liye is thread ka use kare — Chit Chat Thread

Kisi bhi story par apna review post karne ke liye is thread ka use kare — Review Thread

Rules check karne ke liye is thread ko dekho — Rules & Queries Thread

Apni story post karne ke liye is thread ka use kare — Entry Thread

Prizes
Position Benifits
Winner 1500 Rupees + Award + 30 days sticky Thread (Stories)
1st Runner-Up 500 Rupees + Award + 2500 Likes + 15 day Sticky thread (Stories)
2nd Runner-UP 5000 Likes + 7 Days Sticky Thread (Stories) + 2 Months Prime Membership
Best Supporting Reader Award + 1000 Likes+ 2 Months Prime Membership
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