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Ye ek system basad story hai,supernatural power,kalpnik world. Romance, action, adventure... or bhi bahot kuch is me aapko dekhne ko milega .
ye ek English novel se inspired kahani hai. bahot kuch same to same novel se copy hi hai me bas apni taraf se hindi me prastut kar raha hu.thoda bahut kuch apne taraf se badlav hoga jyada nahi.
Harem system karke novel hai.. real writer ka name mujhe nahi pata maine xforum par explained video se novel chuni hai is liye.
ek or baat meri writing average hai is liye writing me thodi bahot bhul ho to maaf karna .
ye ek English novel se inspired kahani hai. bahot kuch same to same novel se copy hi hai me bas apni taraf se hindi me prastut kar raha hu.thoda bahut kuch apne taraf se badlav hoga jyada nahi.
Harem system karke novel hai.. real writer ka name mujhe nahi pata maine xforum par explained video se novel chuni hai is liye.
ek or baat meri writing average hai is liye writing me thodi bahot bhul ho to maaf karna .
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Update- 01
"W-what?"
Rahul choked..!
" tumne meri baat suni" Avni ki voice Sharp or impatient thi. "me ab tumhare sath nahi rehna chahti..Mujhe koi behtar mil gaya hai!.A real man. koi aisa jo sach me mera khyaal rakh shake or mujhe woh sab de shake jo me chahti hu".
Uske words hathode ki tarah hit hue,lekin uska kam abhi poora nahi hua tha.
" Tumhare jaisa chhota aadmi nahi, jo kisi ghatiya restaurant me apni life barbaad kar raha ho."
Rahul ki fingers mobile par kas gayi, uski dhadkan fast-slow hoti hue chal rahi thi,or under se ek voice aa rahi thi" yeh real nahi hai..aisa ho hi nahi shakta"
" Don't call me again." Avni ne apni aakhri aavaj me kaha. " Pata hai kya? Koi baat nahi. I'm blocking you."
Tint!..
Call End ho gay bas aise hi
Rahul khade-2 ek jagah pe jame hue mobile ki screen ko ghurr raha tha. Uska mind blank. Uska heart....tut gaya tha.
Lehre kinnare se takkra rahi thi. Hawa me namak ki ki khushbu feli hue thi.ye romantic hona chahiye tha..ye uski life ki sabse khubsurat nights me se ek honi chahiye thi.
Niche dekhte hi uska right hath vibrate karne laga, uske hath me ek small box tha Red and Gold colours ka. finely crafted, elegant. Uske under ek ring thi jo night me bhi chamak rahi thi.
Ek ring jiske liye usne 5 year apni salary mai se saving ki thi.
Uske liye..
us aaurat ke liye jo uski maa ki mout ke baad uska sahara bani thi, us aaurat ke liye jisne use dark phase se bahar nikala tha.
Love? Maybe. Ya phir ek dependence thi?.
Rahul ke face par ek kadvi smile aayi,uske seene me jakdan ho rahi thi. Uski nazre uper uthi,usne apne aas-pas ke nazare ko dekha.. Soft candlelight ,rait par bikhri hue phulo ki pankhudiya, is raat ko perfect banane ke liye usne jo mehnat ki thi.
Sab kuch bekar
" mujhe yakeen nahi ho raha ki usne mujhe aaise hi chhod diya..."
Uski aavaj muskil se nikal rahi thi, hawa me uski aavaj gayab ho rahi thi.
" kya uske liye ye sab ek khel tha?"
Uske under kuch tut gaya tha.
Isase pehle ki woh kuch soch pata, uski fingers ring ke box par majbuti se kas gai - or nirasha se dahadte hue , smunder me fek diya.
Fshhh!
Ek second time bita phir dusra or..
Rahul phir apne ghutne pe aa gira.
" Wait. Wait, wait, wait-- MERA PAISA!"
Reality ka bhan hote hi ghabrahat fel gay uske under.
" What the fuck is wrong with me?!"
Bina time waste kiye, apne jute utar kar pani ki taraf bhaga. Woh apni five years ki jama-punji or apni gf ko ek hi raat me khona nahi chahta tha.
Lahre lagatar or wild hokar garaj rahi thi. Lekin rahul ruka nahi, pani bahot hi cold tha jo uski body ko chubh raha tha, par uski nazre pani ki under sateh par ghum rahi thi, box ko dhund rahi thi.
Phir smuder me or aage jane laga.
Woh teara, uski arms laharo ko chirti hue aage badh rahi thi, desperation use aage dhakel rahi thi.
" yaha wapas aao,bewakuff!"
Ek bahot badi laher uske uper tut padi.
Wawe ka force bahot jyada or bhayanak tha, mano eit ki deewar uski body se takkra rahi ho. Pani uske muh , fefde or gale me bhar gaya. Uske hath-pair ladkhada rahe the, lekin smunder bahot strong tha.
Rahul ab dubne laga.
Deeper .!
Pani ke pressure ne or dabav dala, uska vision dhundhla hone laga.
"No. No" no, no."
Usns struggled kiya, likin uski body baijan hone lagi thi. Every movement se uski bachi-kuchi oxygen khatam ho rahi thi.
Uske lungs chikh uthe
" Damm it! agar Avni na hoti to me yaha na hota! meri khud ki stupidity na hoti to--!"
Uske thought sust pad gaye. Uski fight weak pad gay.
Fine
Me haar manta hu. Vaise bhi mera wait karne wala koi nahi hai.
Uski body limp ho gayi, consciousness lupt ho gay.
Then--
CRACK .
Uska sar kisi thos chij se takraya.
A rock
Woh glowed karne laga.
A brilliant, otherworldly light phut pada,jisne gehraiyo ko roshan kar diya. Rahul ko use samajne ka time hi nahi mila tha. Sab kuch uska dard, uske vichar, uska astitav - gayab ho gaya.
He died.
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Rahul ki awareness shuny me laut aay. Ek vishal, ant-hin shuny.
Use laga... weightless . Alag. Uski body?-No, koi body nahi thi, bas flickering karta hua energy ka ek wisp, abyss me floating kar tha .
" Wait..... me kaha hu?"
Uske charo or ek mechanical zhankar gunj uthi, ek emotionless female aavaj.
[ System Activated ]
[ You have received the Sovereign Bond System.]
[ You Have Died.]
Rahul thithak gaya
[ You Will Be Reborn Into a New World.]
"Reborn?(punar-janm) What?!"
Aavaj bina vichlit hue aani chalu rahi.
[ Analyzing Host's Memories...]
[ Searching for a Suitable World...]
[ Scanning Novels the Host Has Read...]
" Wait. wait,what?! Tum bahot fast ja rahi ho!"
Phir, final Notification :
[ Ding! The World of Leah Has Been Chosen.]
Rahul ka Dil ruk gaya.
" Oh. My. Lord."
[ Host , Brace Yourself. You Are Being Reborn.]
Rahul ko kuch samaj pane ka time hi nahi mila tha ki use andhere ne puri tarah se nigal liya.
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Thank you bro.. Update upload kar diya hai review dena jaroor.For starting new story thread....
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Bencho..ye forum ki system to pehle se bahod change ho gayi. Ye index me update ki link add karte te woh to ho hi nahi raha mere se bc.. kuch samaj na aa raha mereko . Inte time gayab kya hua apun idher to bc bahot backchodi ho gayi.
Ab koi ye naw system samja do bhaiyo .
Ab koi ye naw system samja do bhaiyo .