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Noori_Natt

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Aik choti si cheez aapko samjhane k liye bata doon k Rumi Hakim ka hi beta hai aur wo yahan kaise aaya waise tou wo story mai aane wali update mai kaafi hadd tak clear krr doon gaa mai lekin mai saaf saaf bata deta hoon q k kuch readers ko shayad waise padhte wakt wo concept pasand naa aaye

Darasal maine ye concept liya hai Chineese manga mai sy ----- Reincarnation Regress aur ye cheezon mai sy hi maine nikala hai ye concept ------ mery sy pehle maine iss ko jahan padha tha wo maine padha tha Saand story mai shayad aaj sy kuch 4 5 saal pehle ------- lekin unn k aur mery concept mai ye fark hai k uss wakt Xforum ki policies shayad itni sakht nahi thi q k jahan tak mujhe yaad hai Dehli walon ko bada tezz dikhane k liye unhon ny Yamraj g sy kuch ulti seedhi baatain ki thi (4 5 saal pehle padhi thi shayad tou issi wajah sy clear yaad nahi)
lekin maine same concept ko use kiya lekin Chineese manga yaa manhava style mai ---- God ko beech mai laaye bina -----
uss k ilaawa mery ilaawa maine jitne bhi system wali story padhne ki koshish ki hai tou uss mai system ko jaadui powers deny wala yaa phir aik window ki tarah show kiya gaya hai lekin mai system ko aik proper emotion rakhne wala likhoon gaa

Sotry ka Theme bhale hi sex hai aur kaafi saara sex bharna hai maine lekin mujhe bohut overpowered Hero pasand nahi ---- mai Apne Hero ko aik insaan hi rakhoon gaa aur jahan zaroori huwa wahan uss ko kutte jaise bhi rakhoon gaa lekin jab uss ko apne saath huwe bartao ka badla dilwaon gaa tou aisa dilwaon gaa k aapka dil khush ho jaaye gaa
so abhi jo aapne update padhi aur jis mai wo thakur saab ki chaat raha tha wo kuch bhi nahi hai ---------- iss sy bade aur burre scene abhi aane baaki hai

Hakim ka past baaki hai ------- jo k aapke saath sath mery liye bhi suspence hai --------- Rajpal Chauhan (film wale lekin meri story k mutabik) un ko add kroon gaa mai
aur hazaron characters hain --------- jahan mujhe laga mai Hero ko over power krr raha hoon mai uss ko kamzor bhi kroon gaa -------- lekin jaise k kaha tha k baaap ka bhai ka dada ka sab ka badla ly gaa so waise hi har aik achi burri cheez ka badla dugna loutaya jaaye gaa
 
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UPDATE_______________________ 4 (Dost ki nunu k size ki update )

Ramlal= beherhaal Rati k mutabik wo tumhain iss wajah sy pasand nahi krti k aik tou tum class mai yahan tak k teachers aur unke doston k samne bhi unko malkin bulate the ————- jo k ab tum nahi bulao gye unko unke naam sy bulao gye class mai
Mai= par malik…….

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ramlal= maine kaha naa k nahi bulao gye
Mai= malik kamlesh malik yaa baaki malikon mai sy kisi ny bhi sunn liya malkin logon ka nama lety tou wo tou mera sirr udda dain gye bina kuch derr kiye
Ramlal= mai samjha loon gaa sab ko
Ramlal= doosra ab q k kaafi saare bache alag alag department mai jaa rahe hain tou tumhain ab bass apni class walon ko class mai jab k break mai sab par nazar rakhni hai ……….. kisi ko kuch bhi chahiye huwa tou
Mai= malik foran sy laa k doon gaa
Ramlal= foran sy laa k nahi dena_______ balke bilkul bhi nahi laa k dena jab tak k tumhain khud wo laane ka naa kahain

Mai= g theek hai malik
Ramlal= last wala ye hai k tum ny ab sy canteen mai unke table k aas paas khada nahi hona aur naa hi unke jab dost unke kareeb hon tou unke doston ko dekhna hai
Mai= g theek hai malik
Ramlal= chalo theek hai ab inn cheezon k yaad rakho aur umeed hai k iss dafa bachon ko tum sy koi masla nahi ho gaa
mai= g theek hai
Ramlal= aur haan koshish krna k Munh par mask aur Ankhon par koi badi si ainak laga k rakhna taa k tumhara chehra chuppa rahe
Mai= jaise aapka hukum malik
Ramlal= theek hai ab tum jao
Mai tou kadam peechy chalta hoon aur phir mudd k wapis jaane laga tou tabhi peechy sy ramlal bola

Ramlal= o haan sach wo Rati keh rahi thi k tumhain koi kaam tha mujh sy
Mai= g malik wo aik chota saa kaam………
Ramlal= haan tou mujh sy bolna tha naa seedha Rati ki safarish……. acha bolo
Mai= g wo maalik aaj mai 18 ka ho gaya hoon tou id card banwana tha
Ramlal= haan tou iss mai kiya masla hai jao tumhain pehle kabhi roka hai kahin jaane sy
Mai= malik wo Aapko pata tou hai meri yaadasht……..
Ramlal= o haaan tumhain tumhare baap ka nahi pata ————— waise iss mai bhi ziada masla nahi hai tumhain naam batane ki bhi zaroorat nahi tumhare baap k khaane mai nahi maloom likh dain gye yaa jagah khali chorr dain gye
Mai= aapki baat malik 100 taka sahi hai lekin wo aapko pata tou hai yahan k logon ka aur khaas kar college walon ka tou agar aap aik call krr dain tou mai koi farzi naam aur id card likhwa doon gaa kisi marre huwe ka

Ramlal= acha tou ye baat hai chalo theek hai mai bhi nahi sunna chahta k meri potion ko koi kahe k tumhare nokar k tou baap ka hi nahi pata
Ramlal= theek hai mai aaj krr doon gaa call tum wahan jaana aur bata dena jo naam dill kry id card no wo khud laga dain gye kisi ka
Khair maine apne uss ghar sy jo mujhe thakuron ny rehne k liye diya tha uss mai sy uss court order ko uthata hoon jo mujhe new id banwane k liye pass kiya gaya tha aur uss ko ly k mai apna id card banwane chala gaya
wahan par kaaf dhakam pel aur lambi line k baad meri baari aayi aur maine wo sab bataya
Aadmi= ab thakur saab ki call aayi hai tou krna tou pade gaa naa
Mai= g
Aadmi= chalo batao phir kon saa naam rakhna chaho gy tum apne baap ka ———- waise pehli baar dekh raha hoon k koi beta baap ka naam rakh raha hai —— hahahaha ayee pandiyee kiyaa joke maara ry maine
Mai uss ko dekhta hoon
mai= G hakim
Admi= Hakim bass Hakim arre bhai kuch aage kuch peechy
Mai= g jiss aadmi k id card ko number ko dekh k mai aaya hoon uss ka naam tou Hakim Gondal tha

Aadmi= hmm Hakim Gondal ——— chal theek hai ab tu khud sy koi id number wala hakim dhoond k aaya hai tou mujhe bass aik baar check krr leny do k koi uss ka ……..
Mai= g maine uss ka naam chunna hi issi wajah sy hai kuch 4 5 saal pehle uss ka poora pariwar maara gaaya aur unke aage peechy koi nahi tha so
Aadmi= hahaha arre bhai pehli baar koi acha aadmi aaya hai yahan koi aur hota tou uss ka munh choom leta chal aa jaa yahan beth
Mai uss ki batayi jagah par bethta hoon
Aadmi= kia number hai uss aadmi ka id card ka
Mai= g ***************
Admi search krta hai aur phir Hanste huwe bola

Aadmi= chalo bache kuch aasani tou ki tum ny mery liye chal ab apna naam bata
Mai= Fida rumi
Admi uss Hakim ki information nikalta hai tou hairan ho k mujhe dekhta hai
Aadmi= ye bi…….
Mai= as per section 21 ………..
Aadmi= haan haan pata hai bass pooch raha hoon k ye naam bhi ussi k bety ka dekh k rakha
Mai= nahi iss ka naam dekh k iss ka baap choose kiya wrna koi purana murda uthata lekin iss k bache ki umar aur meri umar naam aik dum same hai
Admi= tou tum chahte ho k ……..
Mai= g lekin mujhe saath mai permit bhi diya jaye k mai uss ka beta nahi hoon bass ………
aadmi- par tery ko uss ki kiya zaroorat mast jee uss k bety ki zindagi
Mai= saala uss ko kisi ny maara tha ye naa ho k koi uss ka beta samajh k mery ko aa k thokk dy halan k uss ka beta tou kab ka ………(mai ishara krta hoon marne ka )

Aadmi muskurata hai, meri taraf dekhta hai, phir apna kaam karne lagta hai. Thodi der baad meri kuch tasveerein leta hai aur sign karwa kar mujhe aage badhne ke liye keh deta hai.

Aaj issue ye hai k mujhe aik choti si tension thi jiss wajah sy baar baare mera dhyaan likhne sy hat raha tha issi wajah sy chotti update di hai -------- umeed hai k sir ka dard aaj hi khattam ho gaa aur thodi creativity aaye gi tou aage ka bhi likh doon gaa aaj hi warna kal zaroor
 
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Jigar 3 wajoohaat hain meri k mai ziada pics add nahi krr sakta
1st (35%) -- pics dhoondne mai time ziada lagta hai --- pics dhoondte wakt mujhe exact pic chahiye hoti hai jiss wajah sy mera dimagh phatne lagta hai jab ko zaroori pic naa mile tou

2nd (35%) --mera ye manna hai k pics tab add krni padi hain jab aapki story mai dum naa ho yaa phir aapko story mai lust ziada dikhani ho ( sab ki apni apni raaye hai q k maine kaafi saari ghatiya stories bhi pics ki wajah sy lund ki garmi thanda krne k liye padhi)

3rd (30%) -- Mai aik hostel mai rehta hoon tou no Privacy matlab privacy gayi maa chudane ------ story bhi likh raha hota hoon tou aise darwaze k sath lag k darwaza khol k likhta hoon taa k unko ye naa lage k mai koi chupp k kaam krr raha hoon baaki haan story likhne wakt kai baar pakda gaya hoon but ye hai k wo bass door sy hi dekhty hain aage kareeb aa k padne nahi k mai kiya likh raha hoon
Dear aik hi actress ki pics down load ker lain FB se ya google se aur gifs easily mil jaty Hain tu parhny ma ziada Maza ata ha
 

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Jgar log Aik choti si problem ho gayi hai

Kuch din pehle g aapke k bhai ko hui hai aik khaalis ameeron wali bemari
Simple words mai kahoon tou burger bachon wali

Naam hai g MDD
Mental depressive disorder

Sunao phir kaisa naam hai
Ab iss kaa ka pari naam bhi aapko bata deta hoon

1.aap ko marne k liye taiyar betha chutiya samjha jaata hai (Jo k mai hoon)

2.Har wakt aap par nigrani ki jaati hai k kahin saala khud ko tapka hi naa dy (Shayad sirf mery pariwar wale aise hon)

3.Aap ki gaand mai ungli ki jaati hai baar baar ye pooch k keh tum itna preshan q the

4. Jo aap k kabhi dost the hi nahi aapke ghat wale unko aapka dost samajh k unke saath baatain krne ko force krain gye

5. Aap sy mobile laptop ly liya jaaye gaa aur real person talk krne ko kaha jaaye gaa

6. Saale chutiye rishtedaaron ko bhugtna pade gaa(jo mai bhugat raha hoon)

7. Aik mahina unn ghar walon k beech rehna pade gaa jin sy aap ab 3 4 mahine mai 2 3 din milte the

8. No hostel, no college, no job (no mota paisa jebb mai)

9. Kangly ho jao gye (ilaaj mai bhi aur waise bhi aapke paas ghar waale paise nahi aane dain gy k kahin nashe na shuru krr dy)

So mujhe abhi yehi bimari hui hai aaur issi wajah sy aapke saath raabta nahi ho paaya

Waise ye maine suna hai bade writers ko hona aam baat hai si abse meri izzat kro mai Xf k aadhe writers sy iss maamle mai baazi ly gaya hoon

Baaki rahi updates ki baat you ab mumkin nahi hai k mai koi nayi update likh paon agle aikmahine tak (cause no laptop) lekin meri kuch delete ki hui updates padi hon gi tou mai wo share kroon ga 5 6 din baad har baar jab tak k mai hostel wapis nahi jaata

1 mahina minimum under ghar walon ki observation mai hoon
Baaki college k papers bhi kareeb hain tou umeed hai meri jan chorr din gye ye aur mai hosteljaa paon gaa
Taa k aapko update deta rahoon ye naa ho kmai 1 maheeny baad aao aur aap kahain
Huzoor Aap kon ???

Baaki duaon mai yaad rakhiye gaa aur dua kijye gaa kmai uss bhenchod dr ko samjhane mai kamyaab ho paaon k mai depress nahi hoon
 
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UPDATE_______________________ 4 (Dost ki nunu k size ki update )

Ramlal= beherhaal Rati k mutabik wo tumhain iss wajah sy pasand nahi krti k aik tou tum class mai yahan tak k teachers aur unke doston k samne bhi unko malkin bulate the ————- jo k ab tum nahi bulao gye unko unke naam sy bulao gye class mai
Mai= par malik…….

continuee


ramlal= maine kaha naa k nahi bulao gye
Mai= malik kamlesh malik yaa baaki malikon mai sy kisi ny bhi sunn liya malkin logon ka nama lety tou wo tou mera sirr udda dain gye bina kuch derr kiye
Ramlal= mai samjha loon gaa sab ko
Ramlal= doosra ab q k kaafi saare bache alag alag department mai jaa rahe hain tou tumhain ab bass apni class walon ko class mai jab k break mai sab par nazar rakhni hai ……….. kisi ko kuch bhi chahiye huwa tou
Mai= malik foran sy laa k doon gaa
Ramlal= foran sy laa k nahi dena_______ balke bilkul bhi nahi laa k dena jab tak k tumhain khud wo laane ka naa kahain

Mai= g theek hai malik
Ramlal= last wala ye hai k tum ny ab sy canteen mai unke table k aas paas khada nahi hona aur naa hi unke jab dost unke kareeb hon tou unke doston ko dekhna hai
Mai= g theek hai malik
Ramlal= chalo theek hai ab inn cheezon k yaad rakho aur umeed hai k iss dafa bachon ko tum sy koi masla nahi ho gaa
mai= g theek hai
Ramlal= aur haan koshish krna k Munh par mask aur Ankhon par koi badi si ainak laga k rakhna taa k tumhara chehra chuppa rahe
Mai= jaise aapka hukum malik
Ramlal= theek hai ab tum jao
Mai tou kadam peechy chalta hoon aur phir mudd k wapis jaane laga tou tabhi peechy sy ramlal bola

Ramlal= o haan sach wo Rati keh rahi thi k tumhain koi kaam tha mujh sy
Mai= g malik wo aik chota saa kaam………
Ramlal= haan tou mujh sy bolna tha naa seedha Rati ki safarish……. acha bolo
Mai= g wo maalik aaj mai 18 ka ho gaya hoon tou id card banwana tha
Ramlal= haan tou iss mai kiya masla hai jao tumhain pehle kabhi roka hai kahin jaane sy
Mai= malik wo Aapko pata tou hai meri yaadasht……..
Ramlal= o haaan tumhain tumhare baap ka nahi pata ————— waise iss mai bhi ziada masla nahi hai tumhain naam batane ki bhi zaroorat nahi tumhare baap k khaane mai nahi maloom likh dain gye yaa jagah khali chorr dain gye
Mai= aapki baat malik 100 taka sahi hai lekin wo aapko pata tou hai yahan k logon ka aur khaas kar college walon ka tou agar aap aik call krr dain tou mai koi farzi naam aur id card likhwa doon gaa kisi marre huwe ka

Ramlal= acha tou ye baat hai chalo theek hai mai bhi nahi sunna chahta k meri potion ko koi kahe k tumhare nokar k tou baap ka hi nahi pata
Ramlal= theek hai mai aaj krr doon gaa call tum wahan jaana aur bata dena jo naam dill kry id card no wo khud laga dain gye kisi ka
Khair maine apne uss ghar sy jo mujhe thakuron ny rehne k liye diya tha uss mai sy uss court order ko uthata hoon jo mujhe new id banwane k liye pass kiya gaya tha aur uss ko ly k mai apna id card banwane chala gaya
wahan par kaaf dhakam pel aur lambi line k baad meri baari aayi aur maine wo sab bataya
Aadmi= ab thakur saab ki call aayi hai tou krna tou pade gaa naa
Mai= g
Aadmi= chalo batao phir kon saa naam rakhna chaho gy tum apne baap ka ———- waise pehli baar dekh raha hoon k koi beta baap ka naam rakh raha hai —— hahahaha ayee pandiyee kiyaa joke maara ry maine
Mai uss ko dekhta hoon
mai= G hakim
Admi= Hakim bass Hakim arre bhai kuch aage kuch peechy
Mai= g jiss aadmi k id card ko number ko dekh k mai aaya hoon uss ka naam tou Hakim Gondal tha

Aadmi= hmm Hakim Gondal ——— chal theek hai ab tu khud sy koi id number wala hakim dhoond k aaya hai tou mujhe bass aik baar check krr leny do k koi uss ka ……..
Mai= g maine uss ka naam chunna hi issi wajah sy hai kuch 4 5 saal pehle uss ka poora pariwar maara gaaya aur unke aage peechy koi nahi tha so
Aadmi= hahaha arre bhai pehli baar koi acha aadmi aaya hai yahan koi aur hota tou uss ka munh choom leta chal aa jaa yahan beth
Mai uss ki batayi jagah par bethta hoon
Aadmi= kia number hai uss aadmi ka id card ka
Mai= g ***************
Admi search krta hai aur phir Hanste huwe bola

Aadmi= chalo bache kuch aasani tou ki tum ny mery liye chal ab apna naam bata
Mai= Fida rumi
Admi uss Hakim ki information nikalta hai tou hairan ho k mujhe dekhta hai
Aadmi= ye bi…….
Mai= as per section 21 ………..
Aadmi= haan haan pata hai bass pooch raha hoon k ye naam bhi ussi k bety ka dekh k rakha
Mai= nahi iss ka naam dekh k iss ka baap choose kiya wrna koi purana murda uthata lekin iss k bache ki umar aur meri umar naam aik dum same hai
Admi= tou tum chahte ho k ……..
Mai= g lekin mujhe saath mai permit bhi diya jaye k mai uss ka beta nahi hoon bass ………
aadmi- par tery ko uss ki kiya zaroorat mast jee uss k bety ki zindagi
Mai= saala uss ko kisi ny maara tha ye naa ho k koi uss ka beta samajh k mery ko aa k thokk dy halan k uss ka beta tou kab ka ………(mai ishara krta hoon marne ka )

Aadmi muskurata hai, meri taraf dekhta hai, phir apna kaam karne lagta hai. Thodi der baad meri kuch tasveerein leta hai aur sign karwa kar mujhe aage badhne ke liye keh deta hai.

Aaj issue ye hai k mujhe aik choti si tension thi jiss wajah sy baar baare mera dhyaan likhne sy hat raha tha issi wajah sy chotti update di hai -------- umeed hai k sir ka dard aaj hi khattam ho gaa aur thodi creativity aaye gi tou aage ka bhi likh doon gaa aaj hi warna kal zaroor
Nice update
 

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Update Coming soon _____ mobile ki ijazat mil gayi hai kuch ghanton ki _____ so jald hi laptop maang k open kroon gaa aur del ki hui update copy krr loon gaa uss k baad jo modifications krni hui krr k aapko update dy doon gaa so worry not ------ abki baar bhaagta nahi hoon
 

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U_p_d_a_t_e_5

Dekho dost ki nunu sy kaafi badi update hai pehle tou coming soon issi wajah sy likha k choti si aur delete ki hui mai sy update doon gaa lekin baad mai plan change ho gaya aur phir maine rough rough update ready ki jitna mera dimagh krr raha tha aur uss ko phir ai ki madad sy improve krr k aap k samne pesh krr raha hoon​


Rumi ID office se bahar nikalta hai.
Wo apni masti mai apni car ki taraf kuch sochta huwa jaa raha tha k
Tabhi ek chhoti si ladki achanak saamne aa jaati hai.
Pari (drama mode on): “Haaa!”
Rumi (dil pe haath rakhte hue): “Bhenchod Rabi, dara mat! Public hai yaar!”
Rabi (chidhane wali hansi ke saath): “Toh suna, likhwa liya baap ka naam Hakim?”
Rumi: “Haan.”
Rabi: “Good. Ab system bhi Fida Rumi hi show karega. Warna shayad us ladke ka naam show karta jiske body mein tu hai.”
Rumi (thoda confused): “Activate?”
Rabi: “Haan. Tere stats lock the. Ab se jo bhi karega — exercise, kaam, heartbreak — sab ka effect dikhega. Growth shuru.”
Rumi: “Ohh… acha.”
Rabi: “Bilkul. Missions bhi aayenge. Ready rehna.”
Rumi aas paas dekhta hai. Log usse hawa mein baat karte dekh rahe hote hain — kuch curious, kuch awkward.
Rumi (jhijak ke saath): “Chal Rabi, ghar chal ke baat karte hain. Saala tujh se baat karke meri izzat hi kharab ho jaati hai sab ke samne.”


🧠 Rabi Ka Hona — Mere Liye Kya Hai

Jab se Rabi meri life mein aayi hai na, tab se sab kuch badal gaya hai.
Pehle main bas ek naukar tha — naam bhi borrowed, chehra bhi aadha, past bhi kisi aur ka. Lekin Rabi ne mujhe system diya… aur system ne mujhe identity.

🔪 Skills & Upgrades

  1. Cooking Skill
    Rabi ne mujhe top-tier cooking skill di. Jab Rati ne mere haath ka khana khaya tha, tab se main uska khaas ho gaya. Taste ka jadoo nahi — Rabi ka diya hua talent tha.
  2. Decision Making
    Main choti age mein bhi bade faisle le leta hoon. Log kehte hain “mature lagta hai,” par asli reason Rabi hai. Ek cheez jisme Rabi burri hai — jhukna. Usse compromise pasand nahi, par zinda rehne ke liye kabhi kabhi jhukna padta hai.
  3. Strategy Queen
    Rabi ek top-tier strategist hai. Kab kya bolna hai, kis se kya lena hai, kis waqt kaunsa move karna hai — sab uske dimaag mein ready hota hai. Bas tab tak jab tak uska mood off na ho ya kisi pe ghussa na aaye.
  4. Perception Boost
    Uske aate hi mujhe 500 points perception mein mil gaye the. Suddenly, duniya clearer lagne lagi.
  5. Business Empire
    Rabi ne bola business khol — aur khulwa diya. Aaj sheher ki 50% market mere naam hai. Baaki 50% thakur aur bade log sambhalte hain. Rabi ne mujhe unke level pe laa diya.
  6. Survival Among Thakurs
    Main abhi tak thakuron ke beech zinda hoon — aur ghussa bhi. Yeh Rabi ka credit hai. Usne mujhe compromise karna sikhaya, zinda rehna sikhaya. Chahe chaatna pasand nahi, par har baar bachaya.
  7. Human Nature Expert
    Rabi har waqt chudai-chudai bolti rehti hai — par uska dimaag human nature ka master hai. Kaun use kar raha hai, kaun sirf dikhawa — sab pehchaan leti hai.
  8. Enhanced Senses
    Jo main nahi dekh paata, Rabi pakad leti hai. Kabhi kabhi lagta hai wo mere andar se bhi mujhe better jaanti hai.

⚙️ Rabi — Rules of the System

❌ Kya Nahi Kar Sakti

  • Mujhse door nahi jaa sakti — ya toh mere paas rahegi ya invisible ho jaayegi.
  • Physical kaam nahi kar sakti.
  • Jo main sunta hoon, wahi bas sun sakti hai. Jo main dekhta hoon, bas wahi dekh sakti hai. (mujhe bhi dekh sakti hai)
  • Mere faisle khud nahi le sakti — par tang kar kar ke faisle krwa zaroor leti hai.
  • Mere ilaawa kisi se baat nahi kar sakti.
  • Mery stats change nahi kar sakti — agar mery pass enough points nahi hain tou.

✅ Kya Kar Sakti Hai

  • Har awaaz ko alag process karke samajh sakti hai.
  • Jo cheez main dekh raha hoon, usse zyada focus se scan kar sakti hai.
  • Mere stats change kar sakti hai — lekin sirf earned points se.
  • Skills aur blessings khareed kar sakti hai — mere points se.
  • Mujhe sochne ka naya nazariya de sakti hai — jaise overly positive hoon toh thoda negative angle bhi dikhati hai.
  • Uski baatein sirf main sun sakta hoon — par jo main bolta hoon, sab sun sakte hain.

🧩 Readers Ke Liye Note

Agar aap soch rahe ho “Yeh kya bakchodi hai, reality mein toh hota hi nahi” — toh chill karo.
  1. Rabi ko samjho jaise Hero ki dual personality — dono active, dono real.
  2. Rabi ek tool hai — jisse Hero ko kabhi fast, kabhi slow upgrade karna hai. Par Hero hamesha insaan hi rahega.
  3. Hero ke raste mein asool aayenge — unko todne ke liye chahiye ek lusty, negative, aur arrogant soul. Isliye Rabi exist karti hai.


🎬 Scene: Rabi Gone, Rumi’s Mind Fucked
Rabi jaate jaate apna usual “bla bla bla” chhod gayi thi, lekin uski gaaliyaan mere dimaag mein echo kar rahi thi jaise kisi purani gali ki khadbadati wiring.
Main thakur saab ki haveli ke bahar gaadi park karta hoon — lekin time dekh ke samajh aata hai, khaana banane ka waqt nikal chuka hai.
Toh main seedha apne den wale ghar mein ghus jaata hoon — taange faila ke, thakaan ko gaali de ke so jaata hoon.
mert sone k kuch ghante baad mera phone najta hai

📞 Phone rings. Neend mein hi pick karta hoon.
Rumi: "Hello?"
Rati (sweet awaz): "Good evening''
Rumi (half-asleep): "Hmm… Good evening."
Rati: "Aaj aaye nahi tum?"
Rumi: "Aaya toh tha, aap hi nahi mili Malkin sahiba." (Thoda chhedne wala tone)
Rati: "Aaye hote toh main itna ghatiya khaana khaati kya?"
Main uthta hoon, nall pe jaake munh dhota hoon.
Rumi: "Tou khud bhi toh master chef ho ..... bana leti."

Rati: "Tou tumhain mai baakion sy triple salary kis baat ki deti hoon jo mai banati khana”?
Rumi: "Rati, bataya toh tha… ID card banwana tha."
Rati: "Ooo haan… sorry sorry. Batao phir, kya bana? Bade papa ne kya kaha?"
Rumi: "Kaam ho gaya."
Rati: "Toh hamare haathon maare gaye dushman ka naam tumne baap ke naam ke taur pe likh diya?"
Rumi: "Hmm… socha jis Hakim aur uss k bety Rumi ko tum logon ny maara tha mai wo Rumi thakuron k ghar mai ghussa doon "(thode funny way mai taake Rati mind naa kry)
Rati: "Kameena."
Rumi: "Waise Malkin, call kyun ki?"
Rati: "Kameeny, hazaar baar kaha hai — phone pe mujhe Rati bulao. Ghar mein toh chalo Malkin hi bolna padta hai par…."

Rumi: "Ji theek hai, Malkin." (Tang karte hue)
Rati: "Tu marre ga mere haathon se."
Rumi: "Tum maarogi mujhe? Kabhi machhar bhi maara hai aaj tak?"
Rati: "Aaj tu aa sahi… aaj tujhe batati hoon maine kitne machar maare hain
aur haan, ache kapde pehen ke aana.
Rumi: q Ache kapdon mai maarne sy kiya bande ko dard kam hota hai
Rati: Shutup Rumi….. aaj tumhain tumhare janamdin ki party jo deni hai mujhe.
Rumi: "Uski kya zaroorat hai, Rati?———— awaain hi bahir koi tumhain mujhe saath dekh ly gaa tou ……
Rati= wo mera masla hai——- bachu tery paise aaaj dekh kaise kharach karwati hoon —— ye jo tum ny itne saalon sy jodd jodd k rakhy hain naa aaj dekh phir kaise ………….
Rumi= baat paison ki nahi hai ……….. paison ka masla hi nahi hai …… par Rati yoon Zaroorat nahi hai… Nokar malkin aik hotel mai ———— log kiya kahain gye ———- waise bhi aik bd hi tou hai iss ki koi zaroorat banti bhi nahi

Rati: "Zaroorat hai. Aaj tu kanooni taur pe jawan hua hai… aur zinda bhi kaaghazon mein."
Rumi: "Ye sab tumhara karam hai, Malkin. par ……..
Rati: "kutty ,shut up aur haan white dress pehen k aana. (call cutt)
mai phone ki taraf dekhta hoon aur phir muskrata hoon

👻 Rabi pops in
Rabi: "Hmm… kutta. Waise kuch zyada hi frank ho rahi hai aaj kal ye."
Rumi: "Isko frank hona kehti ho? Mujhe lagta hai ye bhi meri tarah…"
Rabi: "Nahi bhai, wo tumhari tarah chutiya nahi ho sakti. Arre bhai, apni aukaat dekh. Wo 2 pyar ke bol bolti hai, aur tu usko chodne ki fantasy mein ghus jaata hai."
Rumi: "Bakwas band kar. Rati ke baare mein zubaan band rakh… tum…"
Rabi: "Bla bla bla…" (Disappear)
Main apni choti almirah se ek achi si dress nikalta hoon, press karta hoon, aur thakur saab ki haveli ki taraf nikal padta hoon.

mai mast apni mast mai gungunate huwe jaa raha tha k peechy thode faasly sy mujhe koi chilla k pukarta hai
Joshi (chillake): "Oye suwaar!! (mera nick name jo shayad gaon ki ladkion yaa bachon ny rakha tha)
mai peeechy uss ladki ki taraf mudd k dekhta hoon tou wo Malti chachi ki badi beti Joshi thi
Malti chachi meri gali chorr k agli gali mai dehti thi ……. kaam dhanda uss ka kia hona tha siwaye apne ghar daar k
2 betian hain aur 1 beta
beta abhi chota hai aur pati iss ka thakuron k haan kaam par hota hai dery par

mai uss ki taraf dekhta hoon tou wo wahin sy ishara krr k bolti hai
Joshi: Rukk rukk 2 min!
phir wo chal k mery paas aati hai

Rumi: Kya hai?"
Joshi: "Amma bula rahi hai tujhe."
Rumi: "Kya kaam hai?"
Joshi: "Mujhe kya pata… jaake pooch le."
Rumi: "Theek hai, Amma ko kehna aa jaata hoon thodi der mein."
Joshi: "Nakhre kyun kar raha hai? Laak nahi lakni?——- hamare haan punjaabi mai kutton k saamne roti jo phainki jaati hai aur kutta uss ko khaaye uss ko lakna kehty hai aur uss phainki hui roti yaa khaane ko laak
Main usko ghoorta hoon. Tabhi Rabi phat se saamne aati hai.
Rabi: "Saali randi, kya bakwaas kar rahi hai kuttiya? Teri maa ka bhosda phadwaoon kaale kutton se…"
Rumi: "Tameez mein reh Joshi, Hamara rishta koi aisa nahi k tum aisi baat kro mujh sy ."
Joshi: "Bakwas mat kar. Amma ne kaha hai tujhe laaun, warna suwaar naam se zubaan gandi ho jaati hai mujhe tou phir bhi tery itna paas aana parra."
Rumi (mann mein): "Maa ko keh ke maa chudaye… teri jaisi kuttiya ki maa ko main chod ke bhi raazi nahi."

Rumi (bolta hai): "Chachi ko jaake kehna — Rati Malkin ne bulaya hai. Unki baat sunke aata hoon."
Joshi jaati hai, lekin mann mei xhochte huwe bhenchod kaale suwar Surat na shakal, na paisa, na akal… phir bhi kaali gaand ka ghamand tou dekho.
Rabi (phir se): "Kaale suwaar, agar tu wahan gaya na…"
Rumi: "Bas kar bakwas ki . Bahar wale itni gaali nahi dete jitni tu madarchod deti hai."
Rabi: "Unki gaali aur meri gaali mein fark hai."
Main ignore rabi ki bakwasiyaat ko ignore krte huwe haveli mai chala jaata hoon lekin shayad aaj wahan bhi meri tazleel hi likhi hui thi jaise rozz kahin naa kahin hoti thi

inside of the Haveli
raat k khaane ka wakt kareeb tha aur ghar mai nokranion ki bhagam bhaag thi
lekin mai mast seedhion k paas khada ho k rati ka wait krr raha tha k tabhi aik Head nokrani type nokrani Lakho mujhe dekh leti hai yun mazze mai khada.
Lakho: "Lo ji, Laad saab aa gaye. Dekho kaise samb suttar ke aaye hain."
Rumi: "Kya hai?" (Thoda gusse mein, aik tou ye mujhe waise hi pasand nahi ooper sy uss kuttiya joshi ki bakwas)
Lakho: "Laad saab, yeh koi abbe ke waleeme pe aaye ho kya? Safed kapde pehen k shokhian maar k khade ho ."
Mai= Bakwas mat krr lakho apna kaam krr ……… mujhe matt chedd fazool mai
Lakho= mai bakwas krr rahi hoon, Haram……..
Mai uss ko darrane k liye paas mai pade phoondaan ko ghusse mai pakadta hoon tou uss ki zuban foran sy rukk gayi

lekin uss ko phir aas paas ka ehsaas hota hai k wo hall mai khadi hai yahan mai uss ko maar nahi sakta tou boli
Lakho= yahan Maa k shadi par aaye ladke jaise hairan khada naa reh ….. udhar kitchen mai jaa aur saari nokranion ki madad krwa …….. aaj wai…….
Rati (seedhiyon se aati hai): Tumhari zuban kuch ziada hi lambi ho gayi hai lakho------------- Isko maine bulaya hai. …. Aur mery khayal mai ye sab ko pata hai k rumi mera cook hai.
Lakho (ghabra ke): "Ni ni Malkin… main toh bas…"
Rati: "Rumi mera cook hai. Jo main kahoon, wahi banayega. lekin mai hairan hoon k aakhir tumhare andar itni himmat kahan sy aati hai jo tum…….(Rati abhi bol hi rahi thi k Kamini ny beech mai uss ki baat kaati)
Tabhi Kamini entry maarte huwe boli

Kamini: "Toh Rati Bibi, ham kya samjhein — aap aaj bhi ghar todne mein lagi ho?"
Rati: "Ye tumhein kisne kaha, Kaamini… chachi?"
Kamini: "Thakuron ka ghar ek saath rehta hai. sab ka khana tak aik hi chulhe sy pakta hai aik jaisa

Tum hi jiss ny alag cook ki ratt lagayi hui hai .
Rati= shayad aapko chachi bhoolne ki bimari ho chuki hai …….. bhagwan kry k jald hi theek ho jaaye mai aapko rozz rozz sy bata nahi sakti k —— bade papa ny aaj sy 3 saal pehle hi Rumi ko mera khud ka yaani k mera personal Cook bana diya tha ….
Rati= mera perrr sooo nalll cookk ………. per so nal ka matlab………………
Kamini= maa k jaise zuban tou tumha……….
Rati= mai tameez sy baat krr rahi hoon chachi tou iss ka matlab ye nahi k tum beech mai maa ko laao gi tou bhi mai chupp hi rahoon gi
Kamini= tumhari tameez ki baaton sy tou ziada meri betian badtameezi mai tameez sy baat krti hain
Rati= kon si tameez ……… Kamlesh chacha ki nasal mai tou …….(chup)

Rati= tum dono yahan khade kia sun rahe ho jaao apna apna kaam kro ……. tum (rumi) jao gaadi ko bahir nikalo mai abhi aa rahi hoon
Kamini= nahi koi kassar reh gayi hai tumhari tameez ki tou wo bhi indono ko dikha do k kitne hi ache sanskaar diye hain Veer bala ny apni beti…….
Rati= ab ki baar akhri baar hai Kamini ……. chachi …….. aik aur baar tum meri maa ki baat kro beech mai aur mai phir tumhain bataon gi k sirf ……. Gandi zuban tumhari nasal ki hi nahi hai ……… maine bhi issi ghar mai reh k tumse bakwas seekhe hain (ghusse mai Kamini ko dekhte huwe)
Tabhi beech mai aik dum sy aik Garajdaar aawaz aayi
Ramlal= aakhir yahan ho kiya raha hai (unn dono ko aik doossre ko ghusse sy ghoorte dekh ramlal bola)
Kamini= kuch nahi papa g …… bass veer ki beti Veer k kitna ulat hai wo dekh rahi thi mai
Rati= bade papa chachi ko bata do k beech mai……….
Ramlal= Kamini shayad tum iss ghar k logon k zakhhmon sy khoon rista huwa dekhna pasand krti ho
Kamini= ye aap kiya keh rahy hain bade papa

Ramlal= Veer ko beech mai laane ki kiya zaroorat hai aakhir………. veer ko ham ny kab ka nikal diya hai ghar sy ……. jaane wo zinda hai k marr gaya hai………… tum murdon ki bhi …………
Rati= inka kaam hamare zakhm taaza rakhna nahi hai …….. bade papa ………. ye aurat bass ………..
Ramlal= Tameez rati ………. maine tumhain aise tou baat krna nahi sikhaya
Kamini= lagta hai bade papa mujhe yahan sy jaana chahiye ………. ab tou ghar k badon k sath sath chote k haath bhi mery garebaan tak pohnchne lage hain (aur ye bol k kamini do magarmach k ansoo girati hai aur wahan sy nikal jaati hai)
Ramlal= Rati beta ye kiya haai ….. Rita ki tou phir bhi samajh aati hai lekin tum sy ye umeed nahi thi beta
Rati= bade papa mai aap ko pehle bhi keh chuki hoon k iss aurat ko kahain k mery maamlon k beech mai apni taang mat adaya kijye
Ramlal= beta ab aakhir kiya huwa
Rati= phir aa k bataaon gi abhi mai chalti hoon
Ramlal= kahan chal di
Rati= Rumi sy treat leny
Ramlal= beta tumhain kah…………….
Rati= aaa aaaaannn maine kaha thaa naa……..
Ramlal= theek hai jao par dhyaan rakhna beta hamari izzat ka bhi ……….. tum ny ab nokar ko apne barabar bithana shuru krr diya hai
Rati= okk bayee daduuu love youuu… (wahan sy jaate huwe)
 
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