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Incest Baadshah ~ The Tales of Debauchery
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Ajay chauhan
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Are yaar isme Jo face hai wo mere ak pehchan vale business partner se milta hai or mujhe wo arrogant insaan pasand nahiItni achhi toh AV hai. Kya burayi hai isme?
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Hmmm. Wait karna to muskil hai pr....Update - 194 [ 21.02.25 ]
Update - 195 [ 10.03.25 ]
is it really take that much time
Vao kya hai na ham abhi thoda berojgar hai aur Bor hote rahte hain aur hamara interest bhi kisi chij mein nahin aata
Aur jab humne aapki story Baadshah ~ The Tales of Debauchery padhi to hamen bahut hi pasand aai agar ham apna list check karen to aapki story top par aati hai and
I don't want to say anything else
So good night everyone and have a good sleep
karna toh padega
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Great update.
Lair ka vivran bhibhast aur darawna tha. Timtimaate bulb, andhera, pani ki chhapp-chhapp, kate huye maanav ang, deewaron par banti- bigadti vibhinn aakratiyan, traps, darawna maunn, yeh koi kamm tha ki...
<Deewaro par bade-bade kaanch ke cylinders lage hue the, jinme se pratyek me jeevit, hilti hui cheezein bhari hui thi.
Unke roop pehchaan me nahi aa rahe the — ang bahut lambe the, maans apraakartik tareeke se ek saath sile gaye the, unki aankhein adh-khuli hui thi.>
Padh kar Rihanna ke shabdon me Goosebumps. Goosebumps.. Goosebumps..., ya phir 'Reedh ki haddi me sihran'. Yeh sab bahut mild words lagne lage, meri to rooh hi kaamp gayi. Chup-chaap uth kar ek glass thanda pani piya, phir ek cup chaaye, uske baad aage padhne ki himmat juta paya.
Harr ek update me koi nayi innovative baat padhne ko milti hai. Is me Juhi ki chheekhon ke volume aur pitch se banti resonance ne aisa bhram daala ki awaaj chalti anubhav hone lagi. You have transported me many... many... many... decades back to my school days, finding frequency by tuning fork. Hahaha... Keep on entertaining us with such novel ideas.
Juhi ka ek bhaanji se beti ka safar bahut emotional tha, Pihu ki cheekhon ne usko apne mann ki baat bahar laane me madad ki. Too good. Yahan tak Pari bhi emotional ho gayi. Aur uska Veer ko plastic ki ring dena, bahut pyara tha.
Secrets bhi saamne aa gaye. SHB aur Transfusion. Lure Path ko use karke Disembowler ne Veer ko hi nahi balki Juhi aur Pihu ko bhi trap kiya tha.
Ab aate hain Veer aur Disembowler ki ladayi par. Waise isko ladayi kahna galat hoga, yeh to ek yuddh tha. Excellent sketches, skills, cards ka sochna asaan kaam nahi hai. Veer ki kameez ka chains ko todte samay phatna, aur ant me chains ka tootna, kafi dramatic tha. Yahan bhi physics ke pendulum ka upyog, Pihu ko spikes se bachate huye usko chains se apne se dur fenkna aur laut'te samay phir se pakad lena, this was entertaining.
<Skill : Oblivion Mark.>
Pehle socha tha ki iske paas bhi Stealth Skill hai, lekin yeh to ek alag hi type ki skill nikli. Dhobi ki tarah sir ko diwaar par maarne ke baad bhi Disembowler gaddhe se bahar aa gaya, usko Veer ke vaar ka asar itna nahi ho raha tha. Shayad isi skill ke karan.
<Skill: Vibrato.>
Aur iska tod Veer ne deewaron ke sahare paer uper karke nikal liya. Wah...
Ant me liquid Nitrogen, Oxygen, gas lighter aur 'BOOM'... Phir bhi yeh Disembowler bach kaise gaya, kaunsi skill ya card use kiya ya phir Lair me koi chamber hoga jisme ghus gaya.
Ab aate hain aakhri sawal par,
'Loss of loved ones.'
Yeh plural me hai, kya dono log jinko Dexter ne goli maari thi, dono marenge. Veer ke liye sabse jyada ghaatak Juhi ka marna tha, usko to Veer ne bacha liya. Ab jo bache hain unme se sabse emotionally dukh dene wali maut Manorath ki hogi, jinhone hamesha Veer ka saath diya hai. Dusri Sumitra ho sakti hai. Kavya bhi 'Mumma...' kar ke chillayi thi. Points aur Fame Points apni jagah rahe, kya usko 1 Random Skill milegi. Shayad nahin, kyonki Mission to fail ho gaya hai.
Udhar Disembowler ka task bhi fail ho gaya hai, usko kya panalty milegi.
Ek baat aur, Pihu aur Juhi ne Veer ko jis tarah se ladte dekha, aur Juhi ne to Veer ka kata hua haath hi judte dekha, kya Veer ka secret bahar nahi aa jayega. Trisha ka ab Veer ke prati swabhaav kaisa ho jaayga. Kya Lair bachi huyi hai ya phir puri khatam ho gayi hai jisase wahan ki saari evidence khatam ho gayi hain.
Ab dekhna hai ki Veer kaise 'Yarnia' ke inauguration ko nuksaan pahuchane walon se nibat'ta hai. Uske System wale dost kab usase milte hain, Kya sab mil kar Disembowler ko trap karenge. Bahut prashn hain, par ek baat to hai, Veer aur Ava ki dooriyan jaldi hi khatam hone wali hain, aur Kaera ki bhi.
Need not to say, a great update.
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Yes, it takes that much time.
Par, mein berozgar nahi hu.
The only option that's there is to wait.Aur jab humne aapki story Baadshah ~ The Tales of Debauchery padhi to hamen bahut hi pasand aai agar ham apna list check karen to aapki story top par aati hai and
I don't want to say anything else
So good night everyone and have a good sleep
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Changes aana toh swabhavik hai.But maybe ab nidhi k dil me changes aaye uski feelings ko leke... Because Veer brought her daughter back... I'll leave it to Werewolf
Review toh dena padega. Warna meri dukaan ka kya hoga?
Yes. Mujhe bhi actually ye pasand hai. Titles ke saath mein shuru se hi khelte aaya hu. I'm glad people are appreciating the titles as well. Kyunki, most of the times woh yuhi nahi rakh diye jaate. I put lots of thoughts into that... So, yeah... Thanks.
Now let's start with the review...
I'm so so glad that the scene started right from where it was left in the previous update. Ni toh aapki aadat h...Seedhe masala to aap dete hi nhi ho... Extremely rare hota h ki aap directly whi se scene start kar do...
Nd jaise hi update start hua h... About Veer's card getting break... His trademark card...
My situation was like this...
Ye update completely fight par focused tha toh ye obvious tha ki scene me Veer aur Disembowler hi rehne waale the. Maine pehle bhi bata hi diya tha ki poora update fight par adhaarit hoga.
Woh build up ke kaaran hi kuchh logo ko fight scene kam se lag rahe honge. But ek hi update me sab kuchh dikha paana impossible ho jaata hai you know.
Ye part brainstorming ke waqt aaya tha. Otherwise, scene aise start nahi hua tha.First one... Juhi ki voice ka usage... Simply amazing...as a reader mujhe tk pta ni chala ki juhi ki voice ka use ho rha tha...wo yaha se waha running... Finding juhi... Her cries... Simply amazing... Pure thriller vibes.
Kaafi Brainstorming ki tab jaa ke ye idea aaya. And, it did add a hint of suspense as well as thriller in the update. I'm glad people liked it. Hmm! Use kamar ke paas hi blade lagi hai.
Abhi toh bahut kuchh dekhna baaki hai jaaniUske baad... The environment... Uff...
Kuch to chodh do aap... Ship me fight dekh li... Sea me fight dekh li... Jungle me fight dekh li... Aur ab underground lair me fight dekh li... Wo bhi graveyard k theek neeche...
Kuch to chodh do seriously ... Aur kaha fights dikhaoge?Sab to cover kar lia aapne... ,
Yahi reason hai ki fight choreography likhne me itna samay kyu lagta hai.Jis tarah se intelligence ka fight me use hua h na... It was chef's kiss...Veer nd pari duo... Absolute beasts they are...
Probability manipulation...
This card is now my favourite for now... Sorry Beowulf blessings...
Laat ghoosa chalaate hue toh koi bhi fight likh dega.
Par, fights yaha system holders ki ho rahi hai jinka intelligence aam insaano se kahi zyada hai. Zaahir hai ladte waqt bhi woh kaafi strategies pehle se soch ke hi ladenge. Aur, wo strategies hi mujhe design karni hoti hai jo aksar kaafi samay le jaati hai.
Thanks a lot. And, thanks for observing as well.The second anxiety phase... Jab Veer k chest me blade ghusi...
Mujhe pta to chal gya tha itni asaani se to Veer ni mrne waala nah... No way... I was right..but the reveal... How he got saved was just...
Yhi to difference hota h scene selection krte wakt ek professional writer me aur ek normal writer me...
Ek normal writer directly wo scene showing kar deta jaha Veer wall se bhida tha nd probability Manipulation activate hua tha...
But aapne pehle hume ek illusion me rakha... Ki Veer shyd fatal blow ka shikar ho gya...
Nd then aapne reveal kia... Yhi choti choti details hi writers ko seperate kr deti h unki skills me...
Mein ab daawe ke saath ye keh sakta hu ki ju koi xforum reader nahi ho bas.
Time pass waale readers alag hote hai. Aur, avid readers ki pehchaan alag hoti hai.Waise toh ju ne bata hi diya tha ki ju bibliophile ho. But ab proof ho chuka hai.
Kyunki, har koi catch nahi kar paata aisi details. Jinhone dher saari kitaabein padhi ho, unhe hi idea rehta hai.Yup! Ye maine khud ne bhi realise kiya hai. Aur, sach me maine kaafi polish kiya hai apni narration ko. If you'll go back to early updates you'll realise how drastically I changed my narration style.Narration ka main humesha se aapko kehti aayi hu... Trust me... Ye aapka weapon h... Ise jitna polish kroge aap utna better hote jaoge... Iss par aap apni pkd mat chodhiyega.... Ni toh writers usually dialogues se carry krte h story ko... Narration me pkd hi ni rehti kisi ki...
Maine pehle bhi kaha tha.. ab bhi kehti hu... Aap aur avsji sir hi wo writers ho jo dialogues k saath saath... Narration k master ho...
So... Never hold back in narration...
Btw... This is coming from a reader who have read many fantasy books...So it's a compliment...
Waise woh baat bhi hai narration change karne ka ek aur kaaran bhi tha...
Foreshadowing woh factor hai jo author ko greatest heights par pahucha sakta hai.Foreshadowing to aapne update k andar hi kr rkhi h... Disembowler licking Veer's blood... Pehle lga uska psycho nature h islie aisa kia... Then we find out about SHB... we realise why he licked it...
Thanks a lot.
Kaafi mehnat kar raha hu mein editing me bhi. Kuchh nayi skills bhej seekhte jaa raha hu.Saamne Juhi ho aur Veer bandha rahe? Aisa kaise ho sakta tha??? It was his sheer will to protect her which released his full power.Fir Veer ka central region me enter Krna... The atmosphere.... The description... Perfect.
Nd then the fight... Seriously ... Jab Veer chains me bind hua na... Aur udhar se Disembowler juhi ko syringe thoosne jaa rha tha.... I was losing my mind...
Nd then they broke... No shackles can prevent Veer from getting to juhi...
Aise hi Renshu ne use apne se taqatvar nahi ghoshit kar diya!Veer...
The creative part... The shackles which binded him... Became his weapon... Sahi kaha tha Veer ne... He doesn't need any weapon. He's the weapon himself... Chains ko jis tarah se usne use kia h... My god...
Renshu knows the potential of Veer.
Thank you.
Woh fan scene mere imagination me aaya tha. I'll tell you something. There are some things which I do and that's why they come out so great.
I go into the deep state. Deep state is nothing but every picture running in your mind frame by frame. You don't know what's gonna happen. Scenes come naturally. I do this when I have to write fight choreographies. Because, that's the part which I haven't pre-planned at all. I know what will be the outcome of the fight but I don't know what would be the fight like. That's something that no writer can hold in his mind.
You can think for a fight choreography at a certain extent but it won't give that much feels.
Deep state allows me to run them scenes so vividly and naturally that sometimes even I get goosebumps. I did this in Crimson vs Veer fight. I did this in Jaw Long vs Veer fight. And, this time too I went into the deep state.
How to get into the deep state? That's my secret.
Of course, as a writer I won't spill my secret.Isliye Nidhi ka matter settle nahi ho raha tha. It takes time. Mujhe pata hai kaha par kaun sa scene daalna hai.Let's just skip to the main part... Sorry....
The moment she said papa... I was done...
Kyu usne pehle kbhi ni kaha? Kyu baad me ni kaha? Her frock... Her gift... The situation... Pihu was calling for her father... It made juhi felt insecured... She must also be feeling mere papa kyu nhi h...
Nd she ACTUALLY said it... Uff...
Even her stuttering was done so beautifully... It wasn't just straight papa.... It was...
P-Papa...
At first the hesitation... The wait... Nd then Veer's acceptance...
Research.Last scenes... Liquid nitrogen ... Seriously... Kaha se laate ho dimaag? Kitna research Krna pdta hoga ek update k liye?I'm asking genuinely this time...
Btw, liquid nitrogen ka mujhe already pata tha. Bas, temperature ka clear karna tha ek baar. I can't write rubbish you know. Jaanta hu ye Xf ki kahani hai par mein waisa writer nahi. Ya yu kahe mujhse waisa likhna nahi aata. I can only write stories like these.
As I said... Disembowler is alive. Abhi kaafi kuchh dekhna baaki hai. Sab kuchh ek baar hi me hi reveal nahi kiya jaata.
This is the beginning... The real beginning. Bahut achha achha ho gaya. Ab kathnaiyo ka saamna karna hoga.Disembowler is not dead... Idk how he escaped from the attack... But... Penalty lg chuki h... Koi aur penalty lg jaati... Yhi lagni zaroori thi kya?
Gaaliya bhi milengi aage chal ke. Mujhe pata hai kya hona hai.The pictures... Sketch... Everything was top notch...
Ab aur kitni tareef karu idk... Ab ni ho paegi mujhse...
No wait... Gaali k liye kisi ko uda mat dena... Not Ragini pls... Not bhavna too...
This was more than enough. Truly. Thanks a lot.Anyways... Kehne ko bohut kuch h bhi aur nhi bhi... Hope you'll understand what I'm trying to say here.. kehna bohut kuch h... Shbd kam pd rhe h...
Just ending here... Ab next review jaldi ni dungi...
Dexter ki kuchh info next update me.
That's a spoiler.2. SHB ki mystery... Disembowler ka kya hoga? Is there another fight coming pretty soon? That's why the name post Disembowler arc?
Post Disembowler arc ke khatam hote hote idea khud lag jayega.
Again, a spoiler.4. Summit arc kis baare me hoga?
Ye chhota sa sawaal tha.5. Ek chota sa sawal.... Mr. X kitna powerful h?
Poora finale arc hi poochh liya ju ne toh.
Thank you so much dear.Keep writing sir ji... Lots of love...
Itne bade revo ke liye rahe dil se dhanyavad.
Aise hi reviews ko padhne ke baad raat me sone se pehle mann khush ho jaata hai, neend achhi aati hai. Motivation milta hai agla update aur josh me likhne ka. Aise hi saath bane rehne ka. Keep supporting.
