Thriller THE PUNISHMENT (Completed)

[Thakur]

Shukriya bhai, Btw BEGUNAAH story read kiya kya???

Yeah wo padh ke review bhi diya hoga

 

[TheBlackBlood]

Yeah wo padh ke review bhi diya hoga

Ohh aisa kya, shayad apan ko yaad nahi. Well shukriya mitra

 

[Death Kiñg]

Pati - Patni ka rishta meri nazar mein duniya ka sabse khatarnak rishta hota hai... Iski buniyad yadi mazboot na ho, to oopar bani imaarat kabhi bhi deh sakti hai, aur jab wo imaarat girti hai tab naa sirf Pati - Patni par uska asar hota hai balki seedhe taur par do parivar tootkar bikhar jaate hain... Shaadi ke baad affair aur apne partner ke saath dhokha, kahin na kahin ab ye cheez ek sankraman ki tarah samaaj mein failne lagi hai... Kabhi aapsi matbhed, kabhi paise ki chah, kabhi jism ki chah.. kayi wajahon se Pati athva Patni, apne un saat vachnon ke maarg se bhatak jaata hai, jo unhone vivah jaise pavitra bandhan mein bandhte waqt liye the...

Parantu, aise mein na kewal wo vyakti apne saathi ke jazbaton ka qatl karta hai balki is pavitra rishte ko bhi apne kukarmon se kalankit kar deta hai... Ishwar ne ek insaan ko kewal yahi ek rishta apni suechha se chunne ka avsar diya hai aur yadi hum apne hathon hi banaye is rishte ko sambhal na paayen, to isse adhik dukh ki baat aur kya ho sakti hai..?

Divya ne jo kuchh bhi kiya use kisi bhi haalat mein justify nahi kiya jaa sakta... Haan, ye satya hai ki kam se kam usne vivah ke paschat kisi mard se anaitik sambandh nahin rakhe, par sawaal ye hai ki kya usne is vivah ko maana athva samjha bhi tha..? Kya shaadi se pehle ek purush athva mahila ka ye kartavya nahi banta ki apne ateet ke har pehlu ko apne saathi ke saamne kholkar rakh de? Kya yahi ek raasta nahi hota jisse vaivahik jeevan ki buniyad shaktishali ho jaati hai... Parantu Divya ne naa kewal apne poorv prem sambandh ko Shekhar se chhupaya, balki itne samay tak use apne jhoothe prem ke jaal mein fansakar thagti bhi rahi...

Yahaan Divya se adhik gair zimmedarana vyavhar uski maa ka tha... Mujhe pratham baar to vishwas hi nahi hua ki ek maa apni beti ko aise dush - krityon ke liye protsaahit kar sakti hai... Parantu kalyug mein kuchh bhi sambhav ho sakta hai... Divya ki maa ko jab apni beti ko sahi raasta dikhana chahiye tha tab usne apni beti ko khaayi mein dhakel diya... Ek khaayi jo fareb ki thi, dhokhe ki thi... Khair, Divyanshu sab jaanta tha ya nahi ye mujhe nahin pata, par yadi wo jaanta bhi tha to bhi use kya hi dosh den... Halanki yadi Divya ne shaadi se pehle hi ek santaan ko janm diya tha to Divyanshu to kya uske aas – pados ke logon ko bhi pata hona chahiye is baare mein...

Parantu jo kuchh Shekhar ne kiya, kya wo sahi tha..? Shekhar ka kirdar ek aise shakhs ka tha jisne kam umra mein apne Mata - Pita ko kho diya, aise mein use Divya se pyaar hua, aur jab uske jeevan mein bache iklaute rishte ne hi uski peeth mein chhura ghonp diya, tab Shekhar ka dimaag firna laazmi tha... Mujhe nahin pata ki kya kaifiyat rahi hogi us waqt Shekhar ki, parantu itna zaroor tay hai ki uske dil ke hazaar tukde hone mein ek pal bhi nahi laga hoga...

Khair, Divya ki asliyat jaan ne ke baad bhi Shekhar ke vichaaron se itna to pata chal gaya ki use Divya ke poorv prem sambandh se koyi dikkat nahin thi... Yahaan tak ki uski us najayaz santaan se bhi Shekhar ko koyi dikkat nahi thi... Ye mere liye bhi ek jhatka tha, par saath hi is baat ka saboot bhi tha ki wo Divya se kitni mohabbat karta tha... Yahi ye saabit ho gaya tha ki jab itni gehri Mohabbat haarti hai, tab insaan ka paagal ho jaana hi ek maatra nateeja nikalta hai... Yahi hua Shekhar ke saath aur aavesh mein aakar usne ek jaghanya apradh kar diya...

Vipin Rane, ek taqdeer ka maara insaan tha jise paison ki atyadhik aavshyakta thi... Vipin iklauta kirdaar tha kahani ka jisne dil ko chhoo liya... Apni Patni aur apne navjaat shishu ke behtar bhavishya ke liye usne hanste - hanste apni jaan de di... Sooli par chadhte waqt bhi uske honthon par muskaan thi, jo ye batane ke liye kaafi thi ki wo apne faisle par khush tha... Uski biwi ko Shekhar dwara 5 Crore rupay to mil gaye, jis se Vipin ke shishu aur uski patni ka bhavishya surakshit ho gaya tha, parantu fir bhi shayad ek bohot bada khaalipan bhi unki zindagi mein ban chuka tha, Vipin ki mrityu se...

Divya aur uski Maa ne laalach, dhokha aur shadyantra kiya, Vipin ne jaane - anjaane mein kaanoon ke saath chhal kiya, wahin Shekhar ne ek aisa paap kiya jise shastron mein jaghanya kaha gaya tha... Parantu jo vyakti meri nazar mein sabse bada doshi tha, wo Thanedar Chauhan hi tha... Paison ke laalach mein usne naa kewal apne farz ka gala ghonta apitu ek nirdosh ko faansi tak bhi pahuncha diya... Chaahe ye Vipin ki marzi se hi hua, par kya wo shapath Chauhan ko ye karne se nahi rokti, jo usne Police mein bharti ke waqt uthai thi? Satya yahi hai ki Chauhan system ka wo keeda tha, jo paison ke liye apne zameer ko bhi bech sakta tha...

Shekhar ke kirdar ka vishleshan karna kuchh kathin hai... Bhale hi Divya ki aur se use kewal aur kewal dhokha hi Mila, parantu iska arth ye to nahi tha ki wo Divya ki hatya kar deta... Shayad Male Ego aur Toote huye Dil ne use majboor kar diya tha wo kadam uthaane ke liye jo shayad ek aam aadmi kabhi utha nahi sakta... Ek aisa jaal tha ye jismei se bhale hi Shekhar nikal gaya ho, apne paise aur dimaag ki madad se, parantu saalon baad jab wo apne jeevan kaal ke antim padaav par hoga, tab uska yahi apradh uske zameer ko kachotega...

Ek aisi kahani thi ye jo samaaj ke anekon pehluon par prakash daal gayi... Shekhar roopi ek aisa shakhs jisne mohabbat ki to tootkar ki, aur jab nafrat ki to wo bhi be-hadh... Divya aur uski Maa ke roop mein samaaj ke us pehlu par nazar padi jo paise aur laalach ke liye kisi ke jazbaat aur mohabbat ko kuchalne se bhi nahi chookte... Nazar padi ek Vipin naamak shakhs par jo apne parivar ke liye apni jaan bhi daanv par laga gaya, ek aam - aadmi ki is se behtar paribhasha kya ho sakti hai? Wahin Thanedar jaise us insaan par bhi nazar padi jiske liye farz se oopar paisa tha... As a conclusion, ye kahani us har pehlu par roshni daal gayi jo ek jurm ko janm dete hain aur mujrim ka sanrakchhan karte hain...

Bohot hi khubsurat kahani thi Shubham bhai... Begunaah ko pehle hi read kar chuka hoon main (abhi uspar review nahi diya hai kyonki kuchh baatein bhool chuka hoon)... Khair, thriller kahaniyon mein aapki ruchi aur us kshetra mein aapke lekhan kaushal se bhi parichit hoon, aur ye kahani bhi usika ek namoona thi... Halanki, kahin na kahin grip thodi kamzor dikhi kuchh sthaan par, parantu overall it was fun to read this one... Especially because of the twists & turns!

Outstanding Work Men!

 

[TheBlackBlood]

Bohot hi khubsurat kahani thi Shubham bhai... Begunaah ko pehle hi read kar chuka hoon main (abhi uspar review nahi diya hai kyonki kuchh baatein bhool chuka hoon)... Khair, thriller kahaniyon mein aapki ruchi aur us kshetra mein aapke lekhan kaushal se bhi parichit hoon, aur ye kahani bhi usika ek namoona thi... Halanki, kahin na kahin grip thodi kamzor dikhi kuchh sthaan par, parantu overall it was fun to read this one... Especially because of the twists & turns!

Outstanding Work Men!

Thank you so much Death Kiñg bhai

Sahi kaha, kahani me kahi na kahi thodi kamjori rahi. Thriller prefix par ye meri first story thi aur pahla prayog bhi. Is story ke baad BEGUNAAH story likha tha maine. Uske baad to thriller likhne me maza aane laga to Double Game bhi likha. Filhaal Thriller prefix par The Revenge likh raha hu jo ki CMS ka 2nd part hai. Time mile to zarur read karna

 

[Assassin]

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[netsunil]

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