Recent content by devil_eyes

writer bewkuf bana raha hai. bin sir pair ki story usme bhi itna late update. babu abhi tak chutiya tha jo apni maa or didi ko chudte dekh raha hai. chacha uska khandan chod diya par babu humara gaandu nikla. baad me pata nahi kaha se uske land me bhi uchhal aane laga. koi sense h iss baat ka...

story incest hogi ya adultery ??

story me maa or komal ka part to clrear ko gya or kuch had tak story apne line me aa gyi ab. par kuch swalo ke jawab abi bhi clear nahi hue hai... 1. maa ka point of view smjh me aa gya ki wo sonu ki fikar me sab pata karne ke liye sabana ko bheji, par wahi sonu ke point of view se dekha jaye to...

bro baat ye nahi hai ki javed ka murder ho ya komal ka suicide.. baat ye hai ki jo baate phle ki story me hai wo fit nahi baith rahi shadi wale part me. contradiction hai usme jiske bare me sabhi bol rahe hai. 1. sonu ko ache or bure ladke ka pata hai to wo apni bahan ko usi bure ladke (javed)...

haa phle wale uss part me writer ne likha tha ki sonu ne phle didi ko room se bahar aate dekha fir usi room se javed bhi aaya bahar, or javed ko dekhkar komal smile karti hai jo sonu dekh leta hai sath hi javed flow flow me komal ko touch bhi kar deta hai jiske baad komal sonu ko dikhane ke liye...

ye baat to hai..... par abhi bhi kahani ko sahi track par laya ja skta hai pichli baaton ko chodkar. writer ke upar hai story ko sahi direction par laye. overall story sahi hai thode se changes ki jarurt hai bas.

sahi kaha... 1. komal ko itna importance kyu diya ja raha hai jabki sabne usko khud apni aankho ke samne pakda or dekha ki kya kiya usne sonu ke sath. 2. sonu ka sabana ke sath sikhna/chudai karna wo bhi itni asani se kuch jama nahi. na hi sonu ke andar hawas jagte dikhaya gya na hi usko aisa...

ye kya kar raho ho?? story ki aisi tasi kar di...... 1.ekk taraf didi ka puran chacha ke sath bonding dikhye ki didi chahti ha puran ko (fufaji se pareshan hui jab wo chhed raha tha) dusri taraf usko chhinaal/ randi bana rahe ho rocky se itni aasani se chudwa kar. 2.babu pahle to puran ko bich...

agree ki ghar se bahar nahi karte hai kisi ko but ase hi maaf bhi nahi karte hai. 1. story me sonu ko dikhaya gya hai ki wo sab ka chaheta hai fir bhi uske sath itna kuch karne ke baad bhi sab komal ki side hi smjhna chah rahe hai... jabki normally log gussa hote hai ki usne kaise hath uthaya...