★☆★ Xforum | Ultimate Story Contest 2025 ~ Reviews Thread ★☆★

[Lucifer]

Unfortunately We are facing a server issue which limits most users from posting long posts which is very necessary for USC entries as all of them are above 5-7K words ,we are fixing this issue as I post this but it'll take few days so keeping this in mind the last date of entry thread is increased once again,Entry thread will be closed on 7th May 11:59 PM. And you can still post reviews for best reader's award till 13th May 11:59 PM. Sorry for the inconvenience caused.

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[motaalund]

vakharia The train that never stops..

You have equal command over both the languages.
The description of feeling and emotions between two are quite marvelous.
The expressions are sentimental and elaborate.
And what a portrayal of chemistry between them.
सेक्स के बिना एक अमिट प्यार...
जो सब जीवों एक समान छूती और असर करती है...
The depiction of separation between them is also intense.
But history repeats itself.
A good and powerful narration
My rating-8.9/10

 

[vakharia]

vakharia The train that never stops..

You have equal command over both the languages.
The description of feeling and emotions between two are quite marvelous.
The expressions are sentimental and elaborate.
And what a portrayal of chemistry between them.
सेक्स के बिना एक अमिट प्यार...
जो सब जीवों एक समान छूती और असर करती है...
The depiction of separation between them is also intense.
But history repeats itself.
A good and powerful narration
My rating-8.9/10

Thanks a lot for the lovely review

 

[Riky007]

Story: Kumudini
Writer: naag.champa

Story Line: Based on a tradition of a village named Paankpara, where Young lady are considered as keeper of protectors who will bring good to the village and they have to please as many such men until someone find them as his lady love. And this culture or ritual is described by the experiences of a young lady named Kumudini, a flower which is like Lotus, but not Lotus.

Treatment: Writen in english, it very well describes the beauty of a village and also beauties of Village. Cennetcts to some extent.

Positive points: Simple yet elegant language, which beautifully defines the nature, and lustfully defines the beauty.

Negative points: Many things are repeated, like the phrase "second Skin" and one whole paragraph is posted twice. For me concept too is not at par for such competition. And also the story must have some end, not waiting.



Suggestion: you are a talented writer and must address some unique topic with exceptional story.

Rating: 8/10

 

[motaalund]

Shetan - चंदगी राम पहलवान

शुरुआत एक व्यंग्य से हुई..
और बीना को लगी चोट ने एक जीवटता उत्पन्न कर दी..
अपनी जमीन.. अपने गहने बेचकर .. चंदगी को एक संघर्ष के लिए ललकारा...
साथ में खुद भी लग कर उसे प्रोत्साहन दिया...
पति को भी मनवा कर कुश्ती सिखाने पर जोर दिया...
इतने कम समय में कुश्ती के लिए तैयार करना कोई हँसी खेल नहीं,
लेकिन निरंतर प्रयास जरुर सफल होते हैं...
कुश्ती के पूर्व का दृश्य भाव प्रवण था...
और भाभी के धैर्य की जीत भी...
इसमें जितना चंदगी बधाई का पात्र है उतनी हीं उसकी भाभी-माँ भी...
वर्तनी की अशुद्धियों को छोड़ दें तो हरियाणवी भाषा में डायलोग और उनका अनुवाद भी काबिले तारीफ है...
रेटिंग - 9/10

 

[naag.champa]

Story: Kumudini
Writer: naag.champa

Story Line: Based on a tradition of a village named Paankpara, where Young lady are considered as keeper of protectors who will bring good to the village and they have to please as many such men until someone find them as his lady love. And this culture or ritual is described by the experiences of a young lady named Kumudini, a flower which is like Lotus, but not Lotus.

Treatment: Writen in english, it very well describes the beauty of a village and also beauties of Village. Cennetcts to some extent.

Positive points: Simple yet elegant language, which beautifully defines the nature, and lustfully defines the beauty.

Negative points: Many things are repeated, like the phrase "second Skin" and one whole paragraph is posted twice. For me concept too is not at par for such competition. And also the story must have some end, not waiting.



Suggestion: you are a talented writer and must address some unique topic with exceptional story.

Rating: 8/10

Thank you so much!!!!
Good to hear an appreciation for my story and I am grateful for the rating

 

[motaalund]

Rajizexy - Nanad ki ichha purti

स्त्रियों की वो उम्र जिसमें इच्छाएं चरम पर हों और पति उनसे दूर...
तो उसमें ननद और भाभी एक दोस्त बनकर एक दूसरे की जरूरत का अनुभव करती हैं...
एक औरत पर-पुरुष की कामुक भावनाओं को जल्द हीं ताड़ लेती है...
और अमर के व्यवहार ने उसे अपने प्रति दृष्टि का सुराग दे दिया...
ननद भाभी दोनों राजदार और हमराही भी ...
और उसके सहयोग ने इच्छा पूर्ति को सफल कर दिया...
लेकिन आगे के कुछ महीनों का क्या उपाय निकाला दोनों ने..
और भाभी की इच्छा पूर्ति का क्या हुआ..
short and crisp story...
रेटिंग-9/10

 

[Black]

Story. Bandish. Writer _ Adirshi

Isi liye main kehta hun ki aap bahut achcha likhte hain balki likhne mein aapka jawab nahi
Amit aur varsha ki baatein jab shuru hui toh maine socha ki amit kitna achcha insaan hai, varsha ka intezar aaj tak kar raha hai, kitna supporting hai woh, uska prem atoot hai . Lekin aakhiri pal mein jo hua use padhke main shocked ho gaya
Main bahut nirash hua ki prem kisi aur ka aur bali kisi aur ki. Lekhni wahi hoti hai jispe padhne ke baad insaan sochne pe majbur ho jaaye aur aapmein yeh kala koot koot ke bhari hai. Aapne jis tarah se dono character ke beech baat cheet dikhayi. Dono ke man mein kya chal rha hai dono kya sochte hain dono kya chahte hain woh bahut amulya hai
You are the best writer in my opinion sir.
Hope aap aise likhte rahenge
Kyunki aap jab likhte hain toh sab kuchh aisa lagta hai jaise saamne ghatit ho raha ho.

 

[Mrxr]

Story ; लागी छूटे ना
Written by ; @Niks77kill
Story line ; romance​

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Story me ek ladka nitin jo dusri cast ki ladki neha se pyaar karta hai,par shaadi nahi hoti unki,aur ek ladki puja jo anshu nam ke ladke se pyaar karti hai,par shaadi nitin se hoti hai.

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Positive points​

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• Nitin aur puja ka character aur unke beech ki understanding acchi tarah se darsayi gai hai.
• Story me pyaar ko acche se dikhaya gaya hai,aur samaj ke logon ki soch ko bhi dikhaya gaya hai
• Kisi bhi rishtey ko ham maryada ma rah kar bhi acche se nibha sakte hain,ye nitin aur puja ke rishtey se dikhta hai.

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Negative points​

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• Nitin aur puja ke character me gahrai hai par,thode emotion ki kami lagti hai kanhi kanhi.
• Neha ke character ko saaf tarike se na dikhana.
• Puja ka wo khat, wo kafi lamba ho gaya sayad jisse emotional touch tutne lagta hai ,usme likhi kuch baaten agar puja khud Nikhil ko end me batati toh sayad story ki ending aur acchi hoti,
• Nitin ko puja ka itni asani se milna normal hai lekin thoda aur struggle dikhate toh ek bahut behtar end milta story ko.

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Mistakes ​

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Story me words ki galtiya na ke baradar hain,character depth aur emotions ki Kami lagti hai,neha ki feelings ka koi scene nahi hai ye thoda dikhane wala scene tha ki uski kya feelings thi.

Rating ; 6.8/10​

 

[SHOTO]

Story review: A Chance
Author: SHOTO
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A gentle, realistic, and deeply felt story that gives the heart a reason to smile (and tear up a little).​

Let me start with this — if you’ve ever been in love, hesitated to speak your heart, or regretted a silence that was too loud… this story will find you. And hug you. And then probably cry on your shoulder.

The emotions in “A Chance” don’t feel written — they feel lived. The story walks hand-in-hand with subtlety. Whether it’s Ruhi’s quiet affection, Naitik’s internal tug-of-war, or the grace with which Ruhi handles heartbreak — everything is painted with honesty, not exaggeration.

Ruhi isn’t the usual “transformation project” we see in romantic dramas. She remains the same soft-hearted, average-looking (by society’s harsh standards) girl — and yet by the end, she is the most unforgettable presence in the story. Her strength is quiet, but unshakeable.

This is not a tale where the hero magically redeems himself with a grand gesture. Instead, Naitik goes through what many young adults do — the painful realization that being liked by the crowd isn't the same as being proud of yourself. His evolution from a confused, peer-pressured teen to a self-aware young man is one of the finest aspects of the story.

And let’s give a standing ovation to Neha, the MVP. Her wisdom, emotional intelligence, and soft sarcasm balance the narrative like magic. That whole pillow fight and late-night talk scene? Gold.

The story speaks volumes about our obsession with "leagues" — who's in it, who's not, and who gets to decide. But it does so without turning into a lecture. Instead, it shows the cost of these unspoken rules — especially on young, sensitive souls like Ruhi.

From kulfi dates by the lake to whispered birthday wishes, the romance here isn’t loud — it’s layered. It grows quietly, unfolds slowly, and hits unexpectedly. The candle-lit garden scene? A dreamy delight. The proposal? Intimate, not flashy. That’s what makes it memorable — it feels earned, not designed for effect.

The conversations feel real, especially between Ruhi and Prachi, and Naitik and Neha. They’re not dramatic speeches — just people talking with vulnerability and love. That line by Neha



A few scenes could’ve been trimmed just a bit to tighten the pacing, especially during the latter half. But hey, when emotions are flowing like monsoon rivers, a few extra paragraphs don’t hurt.

Some secondary characters (Karan, Ayush) remain a bit one-dimensional — but they serve their purpose: to reflect societal conditioning and contrast Naitik’s growth.

These aren’t flaws as much as areas with potential to be even more textured, should this ever turn into a web series (and honestly, it should!).

Final verdict

“A Chance” is not just a love story. It’s a mirror — reflecting the fears we hide, the kindness we undervalue, and the rare moments when someone chooses to grow, not just for love, but for themselves.

With emotionally rich storytelling, layered characters, and a hopeful, healing ending — this tale stays with you long after it ends.

Rating: 8.5/10

For anyone who has loved and lost, hesitated and learned, this story is a reminder: sometimes, the biggest leap you can take… is giving yourself a chance.​

Thank you so much for detailed review. I truly appreciate.

Honestly I wrote this story because, this might have happened with all of us, we tend to surpress our feeling like it never existed for that person who is not "good enough" according to our friend circle.

And thanks again for reading this story.

 

[SHOTO]

Story: A Chance
Writer: @SHOTOStory Line: रोमांस पर आधारित ये कहानी एक ऐसे लड़के की है जिसको एक साधारण रूप रंग वाली लेकिन अच्छी सीरत वाली लड़की से प्यार हो जाता है, और वो लड़की भी उस लड़के को चाहती है। मगर लड़का अपने दोस्तों की बातों के प्रभाव में आकर उस लड़की को अपनाने से मन कर देता है, और वो लड़की बुरी तरह से बिखर जाती है। इधर वो लड़का भी मन ही मन उदास रहता है और जब उसे पता चलता है कि वो लड़की टूट गई है तो उसमें गिल्ट भी भर जाता है। मगर उसकी दीदी उसे हिम्मत दे कर एक बार फिर से खुद को चांस देने की बात करके दोनों को मिलवा देती हैं।

Treatment: कहानी का फ्लो अच्छा है और बहुत ही साधारण भाषा में लिखी हुई है जिससे पाठक जुड़ाव मसूद कर सकता है।

Positive points: romance with happy ending हमेशा ही लोगों का पसंदीदा विषय होता है और हैप्पी एंडिंग से लोग जुड़ाव महसूस करते हैं साथ ही साथ जो एक संदेश है कि दूसरों की चिंता के चलते अगर जो कोई गलती की है आपने तो दूसरा चांस बनता है, वो भी एक बढ़िया संदेश है।

Negative points: कॉन्सेप्ट बहुत अलग सा नहीं है।

Suggestion: बढ़िया लिखते हैं, ऐसे ही लिखते रहिए।

Rating: 8/10

Thank you so much for the review and givivng it a try.